MERE XI

to a friend

I have a friend, it's a bird.
Before I used to pass-by your nest, without even noticing you.
Until you came by my side and chirp.
From that day on, we became friends.
Together we build a big nest as our hang-out place.
We tell each other's joys and sorrows,
Even if you just answer me with a chirp.
I consider you as one of my best friend.
Lately, I cannot attend to your needs,
But don't ever feel that you're being deprived.
Is that the reason why our friendship mellows down?
Because recently, I noticed that you haven't visited our nest.
You've been aloof and it bothers me so.
But just this day I realized that you're still a bird that merely wanted to be free.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. It is good when you notice nature and miss the birds when they are gone. I like the ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Genevive]

I feel like you're writing about an experience we all can relate to. I really like how you used the bird and nest to describe your relationship. If it is meant to be, she will return to you.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I really enjoyed this. Very nice meaning with this. The kindness of friendship shows well in this. I love these parts:
"Lately, I cannot attend to your needs,
But don't ever feel that you're being deprived.
Is that the reason why our friendship mellows down?"

"But just this day I realized that you're still a bird that merely wanted to be free."

[Amata Luna]

Ah, finding a good friend in a bird. The latter wanting to be free. Now that's a lesson of life that we have to consider don't we? And subtly, you did just a great job in making this poem the way you made it as is.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Ah, the positive sense of self, well done, good read.

[Emerald Seas]

What a lovely poem! To share a friendship with such a creature... yet, your words allow the reader to relate this to their own relationships, friendships that fad or drift apart. A loneliness felt, but with understanding...

[jennifer little]

very nice and lovely work you did here thanks for sharing your lovely and amazing work with me

[AK]

Very nice poem! I really liked the theme!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

What a lovely write... you have conveyed the emotions of loneliness, and a friendship that feels distant. Sometimes it takes a more effort to keep those close to the heart, but it's worth it. :)

[Seanne Tholltree]

yeah but it's not what it is...