“The water is sweet, but blood is thicker” Avicci

Family is the most important thing in life.

The river runs deep just like blood.

The beep, beep of machines. The doctors telling you, your time has come.

This means you are sailing towards the afterlife, leaving your ailing body behind.

Your family is going through a depressed state of mind, knowing that you are leaving them behind.

Soon your last words escape your gasping lips.

“Blood is thicker than water.”

Reviews

[bigfootprint]

Good job here, Seanna. We can see talent in your words and imagery. No limits on talent, if you stay with it. I like the second line, but you might work on the last line a little. It is not bad, but it is not original or even deeply philosophical. If you were nearing "your last words," what great message would you leave behind? I might say something about love, or being good, or serving others. It becomes as much about you you take with you as what you leave behind. Images of caring and good deeds would sustain you -- and those you leave in tears. Keep writing, you are off to a good start. Feel free to help me improve my postings. -- Doug

[Seanna]

Thank you for the input Doug. I will remember this and hopefully improve my writing. Your honesty means a lot to me.