the weight

it starts,
like it does every year.
staying in bed
and unable to summon tears.
drink in the house
get really thin
(or fat)
depending on the state you're in.
gradually
the decline of friends.
depression
is a snowball effect.
in the city this year
the school-kids got sick of the snow
threatening their freedom
and their fun.
when sylvia plath
got scared
all she could do
was lie under the mattress
on top of her bed.
and i can't get to sleep
without a three-duvet weight.
that makes me feel safe.
maybe why i liked men
convincing my body
it was on earth
because it was underneath theirs.

Reviews

[Lola Nation]

HAH! Three dimensional duvet at that! Clever and the mention of Plath takes it to the intended level. I don't know why but of the Bell Jar - her phrase, "I am. I am. I am." -- gave me all the heartbeat in the world.

There's even a little Parker in here - I like it immensely.

[Emily B]

I understand. Heavy and controlled and all the things that kortas said.

[W.k.kortas]

This is wonderfully understated and controlled--which, paradoxically, makes it much more powerful writing than it would be if it was an unhappy, shreiking rant. In a review of one of your other pieces, Ed Hart referred to your "bleached and precise words"--which is a perfect characterization of your writing, and which should be taken as high praise. More people should be reading you.

[Alicante lullaby]

lovely work lily,awesome and awe inspiring ,,,loved the end and how your described the whole feel,,,a very common dilemma,,,

[celyn]

when sylvia plath
got scared
all she could do
was lie under the mattress
on top of her bed.
and i can't get to sleep
without a three-duvet weight.
that makes me feel safe.


F*****g, just, amazing.
I wish I could steal some of your talent.