earl grey

there was a boy,
who travelled from over the sea
with wicked eyes,
and a rogue charm.
fixed his father's van
couldn't have been
older than twenty-three.
made a mark on me,
over the coffee bar.
drank earl grey tea.
had a smile
that set his face free.
didn't leave plates.
i am just a girl,
but he made sure to leave
with a backwards turn.

Reviews

[Patches I'm not so new..]

Cute and fancy free I enjoyed the poem reading this I fet as though I was sitting in the sulight in a cafe in France sipping an espresso and reading a bright (as opposed to a dark or meloncholy poem) chapbook One that is almost ready for publication kinda reminicent of the twenth centry lyrical poetess Edna St. Vincent Mallay who just happens to be one of my favorites.

[Lexi Nicole]

Very beautifully written, with a little bit of mystery and a sort of open ending that lets the reader decide what happened. Great work!

[Caydie Hall]

i liked this and thought it was pretty, im not sure what the ending implies.

[siamois]

This kept me wondering for more, a sort of curiosity you give with such blunt description. Love it! Keep it up.

[JRB]

keep my thoughts working nice write

[Lunar Lightning]

Ah, how interesting this poem is. A look into the unintentional over-analyzing of the famale mind, a perfect interpretation of an everyday meeting with one-sided thoughts.

Luna

[Sarah]

Aw cute poem!!! I love this, great description and really flirtatious, I think. XD Like something that happens everyday, but it was marked as a special occasion through words. Great job with this - really unique and cute. =)

[wolfshrew]

You made something that happens to people all the time gain such sweet appeal to someone who isnt even experiencing it. That is effective writing.

[Simone]

Mysteriouse, fun, sweet... great write. I enjoyed reading it. ^_^

[PaperHearts]

This was really sweet! I liked how your poem had a kind of inconspicuous backstory, and the way you gave the reader enough information to have an outline of what was going on, yet held back enough for there to be a sense of intrigue and mystery. For such a simplistic write, you really did create strong mental images through your descriptions, and I could definitely imagine the situation in my mind.
~PaperHearts