The Cosmos Within Us

A comparison between humanity and the infinite cosmos that we live in.

The Cosmos.

The vast beauty and chaos

of all things

enduring one another.

Thriving, and dying off.

Stars. Countless,

and often stunning.

They fill us with awe,

and admiration for

the complexity of nature.

As many of them are being born,

many are simultaneously dying.

As we look out into space,

we realize

how much we can relate to it.

Humanity is beautiful,

in theory.

Humanity is filled with chaos,

and we have always been.

We endure one another

when it is necessary.

While many people die,

even more are just being born.

While many of us thrive,

just as many, if not more,

do exactly the opposite.

Humanity, in a way, is countless.

Well, not entirely, but it is

almost impossible to conceive

of over seven billion

of anything.

We are stunning,

and that is not just based on

what we’ve done,

but also what we have

the ability to do.

We admire the beauty and complexity

of nature,

the very same nature

that created us.

We are in the cosmos,

and, more importantly,

the cosmos is within us.

Author's Note

If you would like to critique this poem, or any of my work, I would be very open to that. You can be as nice or as harsh as you want. Sometimes the truth hurts, but we need to hear the truth in order to grow and become better at what we do. Feel free to ask me any questions about this poem or any of my other poems, or any questions you have about me personally.

Reviews

[Jonas]

I like it, it's interesting and not at all dull.
I suggest lengthening some lines, for it's a bit jagged, and prose tend to be smooth and naturally moving. It needs to roll of you're tongue smoothly, and I believe you should be able to do so with ease.

[TheSeaOfWoe]

Thank you for the read and the review. I think I could do that. One of my friends who also does poetry once told me my lines are too long, so I have tried shortening them up a bit, as of late. I see what you're saying, and I think that you're right. Thank you for the suggestion. I will try revising and see how that goes.

[Jonas]

Good to know that helps.

[Woody]

a very interesting comparison. both universes are fascinating. the cosmos and Man. a very enjoyable read.
possibly a tiny mistake: last line. the cosmos IS within us.

[TheSeaOfWoe]

Ah, thank you for the read and review. They're both very much appreciated! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Also, thank for that suggestion about me correcting the last line. I shall do it forthwith!

[Woody]

you are most welcome

[Wandering Minstrel]

This is done expertly. The flow, the wording shows a skillful pen and abundant emotion. The thoughts are conveyed clearly and precisely and the rhythm moves it fluidly throughout. It holds truth and strikes a chord

[TheSeaOfWoe]

Thank you for the read and review, and I am glad that you enjoyed it! Thank you for the kind words also.

[Anne Timmins]

What a lovely writing. Full of delightful imagery and flowing words. I enjoyed reading it very much.

[TheSeaOfWoe]

Thank you for the read and review. I appreciate it. Glad you enjoyed it!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Wow beautiful extreme truth of the universe you presented here. Those last few lines are all true....

We are in the cosmos,
and, more importantly,
the cosmos are within us.

[TheSeaOfWoe]

Thank you for the read and review. I kind of wanted to leave the meaning of those three lines up to interpretation for the reader themselves, so I will not share my personal view on what they mean. Anyways, thanks for reading! I'm glad that you liked it! I hope it made you think!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Yes I like reading your poem. Welcome friend!

[Aethereal]

Yes, very true! We're the ability of Reality to be conscious of itself. We’re Consciousness.

Reality is us;
eternally so;
we don’t die;
we just flow.

[TheSeaOfWoe]

Yes, we are indeed consciousness, but, more importantly, we are also sentient. I like your observation. Thanks for the read and feedback! And I really like that mini poem you wrote on your review there!

[Matching Socks]

Very deep, love the comparison you make. :-)
I think you did a great job with this, the imagery is fantastic.
Nice job. :-)

[TheSeaOfWoe]

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review it. And thank you for the positive feedback. :)

[Matching Socks]

My pleasure. :-)

[John Anderson]

Bold and deep, this piece is perfectly phrased

[TheSeaOfWoe]

Thank you for your read and review. And thank you very much for the positive feedback.

[Blake Fodor]

Impeccable epic piece, emotions are awesome, imagery spectacular. Truly grand!!

[TheSeaOfWoe]

Thank you very much! *takes a bow*