The first thing, which comes to my mind when I read this piece is..how much each word carry a strong emphasis, how much sadness it radiates. Each word here is so expressive and even screaming for itself. We are in this reality, but somehow we are not. As if you are painter, who is writing and in the same time painting the words. I love how the beginning sounds, the way you create the broken image, the feeling in it, your own emotions...is just great. The person, close and far in the same time, is like resolving in a black and white picture, a shade. I like most:
Your mind is ill
Your body
An aching shell
Insisting on
Keeping
The remains of a man
Alive
A man who once was
Living
Thank you for all your lovely reviews. They are each thorough and feeling. It means a lot to me, you.. read moreThank you for all your lovely reviews. They are each thorough and feeling. It means a lot to me, you take your time here :)
10 Years Ago
Thank you too, dear Selma! I`m not so good and I review rarely, but I like your poems much!
10 Years Ago
It makes me appreciate it even more, knowing you rarely write a review. I favor yours over many, bec.. read moreIt makes me appreciate it even more, knowing you rarely write a review. I favor yours over many, because you are detailed and feel me well. I like your writing too, and shall come by for more reads! :)
A wonderfully expressed sadness, Ember.
It dies slowly for some of us...quicker for the uncaring and "just sunshine romances"..
Well done Michelle...I really enjoyed this one.
...and smile...
Scott
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
:) Thank you for your words, Scottie. You know that I value them.
terribly sad poem that affects me greatly...my dad is in his mid nineties...still pretty healthy in body, but his mind is going...and that is so tough for me to see...he was one of the sharpest people i ever knew...
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
I'm so sorry to hear that.. I know what it's like losing your father to a mind that is fading. Howev.. read moreI'm so sorry to hear that.. I know what it's like losing your father to a mind that is fading. However, thank you for sharing your story. As always, I appreciate you stopping by :)
I'm Michelle. To strangers I may seem reluctant, but I'm really quite open towards those that are patient and genuinely interested in getting to know me. I think a lot. I'm hardly ever bored. I've.. more..