Caught in a loop

My thoughts are cloudy

And obsolete

Over a cup of coffee

Amid foam

Atop sugar

Melted

And stirred within

An ocean

Black and deep

Through a taste thus sweet

And familiar

I wonder in flashes

As if thoughts flicker

Like thunder

Tiny explosions

To no avail

Eager be however

This feeble state

To drink again

Author's Note

Reviews

[Anand Sehgal]

cloudy

And obsolete

Over a cup of coffee

Amid foam

Atop sugar

Melted

And stirred within

An ocean

Black and deep

surreal images. Loved it. 100/100
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[Michelle N. H.]

Thanks, Anand ^^ I appreciate that.

[NeiL ArandA]

Never thought that instrumental music could blend well with a piece....

[Ai Lun]

I seem to focus on this aspect of poems a lot, but you truly have mastered the rhythm within this poem. It flows so naturally! Well done! And you get bonus points because the song on your profile is one of my favourite songs :P

[Michelle N. H.]

That's awesome, haha. Thank you, Aaron :)

[Ai Lun]

You're welcome! :)

[Scott Metro]

You have a very unique and pleasant style.
Such a simple thought drawn and pulled.
Excellent.

Admiration.
Scott

[Michelle N. H.]

Thank you so much.

[*]

Excellent use of theme and the end is simple but superb.

100/100

[Michelle N. H.]

Yay. Thank you, Autumn.

[V. P. Trujillo]

Both the poem and the song, kudos.

[Michelle N. H.]

Haha, cheers.

[Coyote Poetry]

Very good use of description in the poem. I like the use of coffee in your words. Allowed me to wander to a better place for a moment. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Michelle N. H.]

I'm so happy you liked it. Thanks :)

[Michelle N. H.]

So unique, and beautiful psychedellic, Michelle... your thoughts, are in rich metaphor, with the coffee, cream and sugar, I like this little poem a lot... you took me on a brief vacation in mind, while reading this, I even saw landscapes, so surrel... nice work lady! ;)

- Elisa

[Michelle N. H.]

Thank you so much, Elisa! It means a lot :)

You're very welcome dear :)

[Neon]

Ha! Very nice write, i enjoyed it. You know what when you feel happy just as same as an angel and bounces on your sofa with earplugs/earphones and listen music then such kinda beautiful words always come from angel's mind to write. I loved this concept you penned. Title's yeah the yeah hell cool!
Keep writing!
Keep dancing!
Keep Bouncing!
Keep smiling and spreading the love everywhere in your scent to make a world delight :)

Am sorry but you've again got 100/100 rating.
Nice job!

[Michelle N. H.]

I don't think I've ever encountered a person with such a vast amount of energy. Thank you yet again, Nèon, for wanting to read my stuff and for leaving a comment. I do appreciate it!

[Neon]

Am oneself feeling honored to have your sweet and so lovely words. Thanks, pretty for giving me such an honor. You too are a very beautiful angel with the great positivism and great talent of doing every thing creatively to make this world more artistic coz, it's you and your scent that make the air cold and make the wind glow to let the humans take a breeze of the beauty of life to survive on into the world. I always love seeing someone as beautiful as you so nice and beautiful :)

Keep smiling my dear, Michelle coz, it's smile is what that starts the day with the first ray of a sun for spreading the colors into the world :)

May you have a power of a Goddess!

[prodicallife]

Dear Michelle,

My thoughts are all stird with the sweetness of sugar and hollowness of the foam.

How enriched one would feel if reads this poetry from both point of views.

1) A cute delicious poetry crafted with lots of flavors.
2 A realistic tail about the paiting of life that has the tint in it of all the shades.

How simple yet, beautifully crafted poetry.

Live young and keep writing good.

Stay blessed
Prodical

[Michelle N. H.]

You have me smiling here. Thanks a lot :) I value your words.

[prodicallife]

Pleasure is mine.

I am honored.

Thanks

Stay blessed
Prodical :)