Caught in a loop

Caught in a loop

A Poem by Michelle N. H.

My thoughts are cloudy

And obsolete

Over a cup of coffee

Amid foam

Atop sugar

Melted

And stirred within

An ocean

Black and deep

Through a taste thus sweet

And familiar

I wonder in flashes

As if thoughts flicker

Like thunder

Tiny explosions

To no avail

Eager be however

This feeble state

To drink again

© 2018 Michelle N. H.


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cloudy

And obsolete

Over a cup of coffee

Amid foam

Atop sugar

Melted

And stirred within

An ocean

Black and deep

surreal images. Loved it. 100/100
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Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Michelle N. H.

10 Years Ago

Thanks, Anand ^^ I appreciate that.



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Never thought that instrumental music could blend well with a piece....

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I seem to focus on this aspect of poems a lot, but you truly have mastered the rhythm within this poem. It flows so naturally! Well done! And you get bonus points because the song on your profile is one of my favourite songs :P

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Michelle N. H.

10 Years Ago

That's awesome, haha. Thank you, Aaron :)
Ai Lun

10 Years Ago

You're welcome! :)
cloudy

And obsolete

Over a cup of coffee

Amid foam

Atop sugar

Melted

And stirred within

An ocean

Black and deep

surreal images. Loved it. 100/100
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Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Michelle N. H.

10 Years Ago

Thanks, Anand ^^ I appreciate that.
You have a very unique and pleasant style.
Such a simple thought drawn and pulled.
Excellent.

Admiration.
Scott

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Michelle N. H.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much.
Excellent use of theme and the end is simple but superb.

100/100

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Michelle N. H.

10 Years Ago

Yay. Thank you, Autumn.
Both the poem and the song, kudos.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Michelle N. H.

10 Years Ago

Haha, cheers.
Very good use of description in the poem. I like the use of coffee in your words. Allowed me to wander to a better place for a moment. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Michelle N. H.

10 Years Ago

I'm so happy you liked it. Thanks :)
So unique, and beautiful psychedellic, Michelle... your thoughts, are in rich metaphor, with the coffee, cream and sugar, I like this little poem a lot... you took me on a brief vacation in mind, while reading this, I even saw landscapes, so surrel... nice work lady! ;)

- Elisa

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Michelle N. H.

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Elisa! It means a lot :)

10 Years Ago

You're very welcome dear :)
Ha! Very nice write, i enjoyed it. You know what when you feel happy just as same as an angel and bounces on your sofa with earplugs/earphones and listen music then such kinda beautiful words always come from angel's mind to write. I loved this concept you penned. Title's yeah the yeah hell cool!
Keep writing!
Keep dancing!
Keep Bouncing!
Keep smiling and spreading the love everywhere in your scent to make a world delight :)

Am sorry but you've again got 100/100 rating.
Nice job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Michelle N. H.

10 Years Ago

I don't think I've ever encountered a person with such a vast amount of energy. Thank you yet again,.. read more
Neon

10 Years Ago

Am oneself feeling honored to have your sweet and so lovely words. Thanks, pretty for giving me such.. read more
Dear Michelle,

My thoughts are all stird with the sweetness of sugar and hollowness of the foam.

How enriched one would feel if reads this poetry from both point of views.

1) A cute delicious poetry crafted with lots of flavors.
2 A realistic tail about the paiting of life that has the tint in it of all the shades.

How simple yet, beautifully crafted poetry.

Live young and keep writing good.

Stay blessed
Prodical

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Michelle N. H.

10 Years Ago

You have me smiling here. Thanks a lot :) I value your words.
prodicallife

10 Years Ago

Pleasure is mine.

I am honored.

Thanks

Stay blessed
Pro.. read more

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Michelle N. H.

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