Something beautiful

There is a sigh within my sentences

And a line I have to cross

A light strokes my table to

Escape the morning rush

And to grieve for the loss of

Something beautiful

 

It escapes me every now and then

Between these timid fingers

Like snowflakes during winter

Melts in the palm of a hand

I cannot seem to grasp

What I am not thought

To understand

 

But it was

Yet came to be

For mortal  eyes   only

 Something  beautiful   that    escaped     me

Reviews

[Michelle N. H.]

This is such a realisation, that often comes on early mornings... how many times, we feel so rushed, and yearn for a moment of peace, and rest, and awareness... and most of all balance the (three)... ;)

I love it how you richly speak in metaphor, and compare this feeling to snow, that falls on the palm of your hands, for there it melts, and it becomes one, with your skin, as the feeling does fades away, or will "be accepted".

Your ending, is so trancient, impermanent, and ellusive, it's that "precisely" that you can bring over so well with your gifted pen, my sweet Sis. A real beautiful piece of felt poetry here... Lovely! -x-

- Elisitta :)

[Michelle N. H.]

You always walk your own unique path when it comes to the reviews you give, not to mention the poetry you write. I love that.. Thank you, Elisitta, for your beautiful perspective ^^

You are very welcome ^^ I love to live here, and feel your poetry! It brings so many new perspectives, and it shows, how beautifully unique you are. :) -x-

[Michelle N. H.]

So does your poetry. It truly inspires, hence your comments here encourage me to keep on x

You should never stop writing... for you truly have a gift... and can reach out, branch out, to those who will understand, it's beautiful, what you do... :)

[Aries]

It's difficult to find a way to convey our thoughts sometimes and that's a huge part of being a writer - putting our feelings into words that others can understand, while leaving them with all the emotions that we feel ourselves, as writers. I love this piece, it really captures the essence of what that loss of words feels like.

[Michelle N. H.]

I have to agree with you on that, it can be very difficult. Sometimes it feels as though these words have a life of their own anyway.. Thank you for sharing your thoughts :) Glad you enjoyed this piece of mine.

[Amber Perry]

Lost love? The meaning is a little unclear, but I suppose that's what's great about poetry--leaving it up to the reader to interpret. Overall, a very lovely piece.

[Michelle N. H.]

I was having a bit of a writer's block, what's escaping me are the words, but no interpretation is incorrect. Thanks for the review, Amber :)

[OnePiece]

Nice I Like IT HEHE
A Mysterious Beauty Only A Living Vampire Only Knows GRRR Jus Saying Hehe

[Michelle N. H.]

Haha, that's one interpretation. Glad you liked it :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

lovely one dear poet ,I love how you paint such vivid images with your words,

[Michelle N. H.]

Glad to see you stopping by, I'm pleased you enjoyed this one :)