It's time

A tanka...didnt know what it was till I read one of Willard Wells. Syllables 57577

It started at two
Agonizing pain she felt
In intervals quick
“Wake up! Dear papa to be”
At five they held their baby.

Reviews

[Stonz P.]

I see what you did there... ;)
Clever... pretty clever.. By the time I'm at the end I can envision it happening.

I, myself indulge in Japanese forms.. would like to know your opinions.. checking your other works out too..

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice ending to the poem. Birth of a child. Best day of a life. You said a handful in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Scrap]

Thank you. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Cody Jeremy Thompson]

Yeah tanka i definite know what a tanka is, at least i will after i google it. I do like these because they have that feeling of elegance to them and are overall nice little pieces of writing

[Scrap]

Thank you.

[Inject Positivity]

Awww!!! That is amazing....The concept is truly mind blowing....Cleverly written tanka, doesn't seem to me as your first one.....Loved it....Syallables are smartly used too....

[Scrap]

Thank you very mucj

[Scrap]

Much......

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Wow! Another piece with so eloquently framed words!
Absolutely loved this clever tanka!

[Scrap]

Thank you...it was fun...my first...:-)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Fun! Well honestly, I didn't know what tanka is at all, came across it for the first time. Seems interesting.
You are welcome.

[andrew mitchell]

and it happens that quick at the end the hours of pain are left behind you and you hear the cry!. A clever write!

[Scrap]

Thanks. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and quite cleverly conceived...pun definitely intended....

i like the time you used..yes, it started at two, but also with two who became one and now become three.

j.

[Scrap]

Ohhhhhh thank you! And yes!!!! Started at 2, 3 hours later they were three.

I thought I was the only nerd around. Hahaha

Big hug.

[Willard Wells]

I like it very much. You have not only brought a poem but a complete story. Bravo. Now tell me this is a story you have been milling around for a bit, looking for the vehicle? Well done.

[Scrap]

Thank you! And no....I'm impulsive and it just came to me....
That's probably why I cant write masterpieces....I write something usually within 10 minutes...and this one was really quick...as you are my witness. haha

Thanks once again!

[Willard Wells]

I thought you might be one of my people. My writing is instant also. Like you when I first saw one I wrote it. Now I am addicted. Or another addiction, but this one I like. It's safe. The first line of one of the people, it's the overactive mind that runs at many levels.

It seems to come in different shapes and sizes depending on the person. I write from the space.