Rainwater Kettle

im not so good at rhymig poems. i wrote this during an english N.A.B, because i was so stressed i just had to express my self.

Stress!Stress! I cant go on
trapped in this blasted heat
like water in a kettle I'm
boiling, melting into my seat

but unlike boiling water
I will not turn to steam
which would float out of the window
into the dead sun's gleam

I'd float up o'er the mountains
into the blinding rain
wash away my discontent
untill i'm whole again

but what if i got lost
and fell in to factory dust
i'd cough up all my goodness
leaving only greed and lust

so i will just stay here
halfway 'tween hevan and hell
I'll dream about the mountains
and the rain's pure, earthy smell

Author's Note

thankyou for any reviews :D

Reviews

[Jake Erkens]

This is a good poem and the simple subject is easy to figure out as is the complex subject(in a good way)! Although on the third part you need to watch which words you choose because if they may contain an uncomfortable number of syllables it may make the flow of your poem rough, same goes for lines with too short of syllables. It's very good though :)