Vomit

No winners in Russian Roulette

The only bullet
was in my hand

 

so imagine
my surprise when,

 

after spinning
the chamber
and squeezing
the trigger,

 

everyone else’s screams
were drowned out

 

by the sound
that preceded
heaven erupting
and the deluge
hitting the wall
of our makeshift
hell.

 

I will never forget the cop
that ran back out of
the abandoned mobile home
in order to let us watch
him vomit.

Reviews

[Corset]

Even the most hardened, seasoned hero's take a dive out the back, this is so raw and stomach churning, I love it's real effect on my senses, albeit difficult to see, hear and smell. This happened with my sisters second husband, it was horrendous for her, well, all of us. You've conveyed it ...almost too well.

[w]

This is a true event from my teenage years.

[Maan]

Your words are not just words, they seems to come out of some experience you've been through in your life or the things you experience by seeing or by some mean. A different but real side, a truth that has become a trend to play with. This is not just a poem, poem is just your way of expressing your feelings. You've kept it simple, no fashion of words. Simple and straight. I like it. Keep writing. :)

[w]

We can only write what we know and I only know what I have seen and/or experienced.

Thank you for the thoughtful comment.

[Maan]

Absolutely! I agree and let me say it too.
"We can only write."

God Bless.

[V.J.C.]

Well, that is the first word that comes to mind. Before the rest of it rushes forth, you wrote this poem nicely. Not that there is anything nice about the poem.

[GunMetal]

This reminds me of something Stephen King would write. I don't know if you like SK or even like being compared to him, but the feeling was similar. The way I pictured the whole thing going down. It was the things you didn't tell us that makes this so intriguing.

[w]

Vague was the only way I could write it and not cry all over the paper. Thank you

[That_Girl]

GunMetal- my thoughts exactly! This was very well written.

[Marissa]

kind of odd, but good.

[Laura Maidah]

Great vulgarity of the last two words. It's, in a way, more violent than the first portion.

[Jordan A. Wilson]

This is unsettling but I like it. Props on conveying this in writing.

[MOON]

Emotional vivid write.

[Amila Jay]

Excellent write :))

[Tiffy Yvonne]

i love the rawness of it