This is a new form I created a few years back. It has yet to catch on, but I have not really put it out there for people to use.
The first and last lines go together and the first 4 line stanza goes with the first line, however loosely and the last 2 line stanza goes with the last line. The whole piece should tie together.
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I could tell even before I read your note that the first and last line go together, bookending the entire piece. The format was very inventive. Perhaps I'll use it someday.
As for this piece, the 4-line stanza gives me the image of someone in a straitjacket, which I can see going with the line Lost if it refers to the mind. While the 2-line stanza feels much simpler, but easier to relate to. Overall, I'm impressed. Well done.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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Amazing form, and more important, amazing message. Keep it up in your own created styles, I like that.
Really nice poem. It's short but there's so many more words spoken, actual written words aren't needed, invisible words are floating around the poem without being written. (Hope that blurb made sense haha)
I could tell even before I read your note that the first and last line go together, bookending the entire piece. The format was very inventive. Perhaps I'll use it someday.
As for this piece, the 4-line stanza gives me the image of someone in a straitjacket, which I can see going with the line Lost if it refers to the mind. While the 2-line stanza feels much simpler, but easier to relate to. Overall, I'm impressed. Well done.
I absolutely loved it, so beautiful!
The form is amazing and just proves all the talent you hold. Wondeful read. Wonderful write. I'd like to try this form.
I climb inside my mind through the windows to the soul that I sold for a kiss in the fourth grade.
I write about the adventures I have in my schizophrenic mind and the scars that my past has left. .. more..