Forgotten Title

I have forgotten more than I ever knew I knew if I knew it at all.

A mind full of pockets of nothing,
memories riddled with h les,
thoughts bro ken and fra g mented,
sentences that. before the period,
conversations becoming snippets of words.

Communication ... not my ... suit.

Author's Note

there are no errors that are not intentional here (that I know of)

Reviews

[Amelie]

Awesome structure you got there. Experimental in the safest sense. The first line pulled off the everything else though it seemingly sounded a bit awkward for others. But it didn't let the piece suffer, there's a perfect resonance and your inventiveness was damn sick.

[Liza]

i was only drawn to read your pieces as you announced on status update that diary enteries are not poetry..i am puzzled here and disconnected - poetry is a connection

[w]

what puzzles you?

[Liza]

I am not sure what the purpose of the piece was, the words were eloquent, but i felt lost. Thanks for asking.

[w]

The end line was the point. "Communication ... not my ... suit" (Communication is not my strong suit). Personal admission piece. "Write what you know" and what do we know better than ourselves?

[Liza]

Communication you have done, perhaps connection is missed. I get it now.

[Little Whisper]

This is such a wonderfully clever write! :)

[w]

Thank you very much.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Awesome! Did you do the split words to help prove that point? If you did that's cool!

[Becky]

I like the first line, and the rest of the poem, exactly as it is. I think if you changed it, the meaning would be lost. Beautiful write! 100/100

[w]

I think so too. :D

[Muse]

Creative...nothing cliche about this. I felt like I developed a "lisp" when reading this.

[Mazie Tackett]

to be honest it confused me

[w]

Tell me what confused you.

[Mazie Tackett]

all of it i understood the like meaning but the way you wrote it kinda confused me

[w]

alliteration

[Mazie Tackett]

not that

[Harley (arbiter)]

Is it how the words are split sometimes? I think he did that to help prove the point.

[Mazie Tackett]

Ya I got that I liked that

[Harley (arbiter)]

Oh. Help I's a trying ta help so yep. That's pretty much all I can tell ya.

[†Tracey†]

I'm odd and off the beaten path in life but I love the opening line as is. I get it.. the flow is great and I love the creativity..

[Ceri]

Very clever! I'm going to contradict the other review and say that I love your first line... and then every line following. The revised first line would work just as well though, depending on your personal preference.

[Jordan A. Wilson]

Very creative, I had to read this one more than once.