Left Alone

I write what I know - me

Trembling hands cover my crying eyes
with my elbows propped on my knees
and my back firmly pressed against the wall.

This is where you left me when you walked away,
here out in the open where anyone could see me.

We argued over inane things
that meant nothing to no one,
but seemed to mean the world to you.

Then you stormed away, fuming
from something insignificant I said,
never once looking back
as tears fell down my cheeks.

Now I am truly alone,
with only the pity
of those that pass by
to keep me company.

So I gently rock back and forth,
trying to stop the endless flow
through cold fingers and will alone,

but failing as I wail into the darkness,
screaming a primal scream
that no one pays attention to.

I am just one more crazy person
left to wallow in my confusion
alone, tired, and cold �" without you.

Author's Note

I will never ask anyone to be gentle with me as I have never had anyone be gentle before.

Reviews

[Corset]

But don't you see? This is where you need to be, out here teaching us what it is like so we can better understand those we love and can not fathom the depths of what drives the actions of them...I think if you reached out to this person as you have done with us she would come running, and if she doesn't , well, nothing ventured nothing gained, except the rest of us will KNOW, and you maybe able to understand yourself a little better as well, I hope you keep writing and sharing.

[MOON]

This has a good flow to it and you managed to carry that emotion of heartbreak and misunderstood feelings well.

[Perfect Mistake]

Very vividly written, packed with lots of emotion and a great deal of pain and other such feelings. Great story that was told throughout also. Good work :3

[Siena - Silent Awakenin..]

I could really relate to this, sometimes when you need to have a moment, to cry... things start to seem less distorted. Realisation kicking in:
"I am just one more crazy person
left to wallow in my confusion."
Even the intro: "I write what i know" drew me in... esp the opening line, you so quickly set the tone, pace and feeling of the poem. Brilliant!

[The Pain Stays Fresh]

This is so sad. There's so much emotion in this. Very heart-wrenching. So beautifully written. Well done.

[Kuhr Gred]

awww.. what the poem??.. it makes me sad... but anyway.. i like it the way how you written your feelings.. just always smile even you're times alone.. thanks for sharing
- Kuhr Gred

[Lily Mae]

"I am just one more crazy person
left to wallow in my confusion
alone, tired, and cold " without you."

This I can relate to..and it truth and raw honesty are so powerful.. I do have known and been left in this place..x

[~LadyWolf~]

Very deep, and very sad! There is a lot of emotion in this poem, great job!

[Laura Maidah]

You want crit? I got crit. Many people on this site are such pale first-timers. I'm glad you like it rough. I found your diction stale, your prosody was worn. No aural motif to speak of. Thematically adequate.

Now the praise: It's so present. It reads like every teen should read you. You could edit the meter, rephrased the transitions, and publish this in my magazine. It's a shame you don't go to my college. This is very moving for many young readers with turmoil in their lives, i.e. just about everybody.

[w]

edit it and publish t then, or just take the challenge and edit it.

[Laura Maidah]

Lol. Your job, punk. I reread it. It's growing on me. Concept-wise.

[w]

I was a punk 15 years ago. If your mag takes unsolicited pieces and from outside its area of readers then shoot me info. If not then don't tease, even though you do it so well (don't read into that)

[Laura Maidah]

haha. I haven't been a tease since I was fifteen.

[w]

you are going to get me in trouble. i swear.

[Laura Maidah]

lmfao

[Maya Storm]

The title of this piece should have been. You seemed to be more in that state when this person walked away. If you knew what really happened you may have been more at piece and being alone would not have been the main feeling.

I like the clouded and gloomy feel of this piece... it felt like a rainy day. I felt the emotions coming through. I don't know why at the end of this piece I felt more mad at you than sad for you. I'll explain:

"We argued over inane things
that meant nothing to no one,
but seemed to mean the world to you."

I have heard this very phrase said to me and I have said it a dozen times to others. I have learnt that the point of communication is understanding the other persons' point of view. Regardless of how important it seems in the grand scheme of things. If you care about a person, it should be a privilege to stand under their insanity. I am glad that I got the chance to understand that in my own relationship.

I liked this piece it really hit home with me.

[ForeverNever]

Let me feeling speechless. Quite beautiful in its own form. Beauty at its worst I guess you could say.