the music

love is nothing more than a dance

spread your loving hands
all over my body
and let’s dance,
while the music
has us in a trance.

press your naked flesh
all over my body
and let’s grind,
while the music
melts our mind.

kiss your swollen lips
all over my body
and just let go,
while the music
takes control.

breathe your sultry breath
all over my body
and sink in,
while the music
moves my skin.

wrap your spent arms
around my body
and just drop,
while the music
comes to a stop.

Author's Note

lack of capitalization is purposeful. when read it is supposed to be whispered.

Reviews

[GunMetal]

I like that you specified this to be read in a whisper, because while I read it, I imagined the music playing behind the narrator. Loud, heavy, exciting. But the whispered verses over the loud music make it feel like something to be heard in secret, if to be heard at all. Heard only by the narrator, spoken through the rhythm and the dance.

[Corset]

Very nice visuals and audio in this one, very sensual.

[The Pain Stays Fresh]

I agree with GunMetal. This is really good! Very simple. So open with no hidden meanings. A wonderful piece. :)

[Alicia Beavis]

Reading this piece in a whisper makes it all the more sensual. I thought it clever how you ended the poem with the line "comes to a stop" because it just coincides perfectly. Very nicely done.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

Beautiful I love the whisper of it.

Nice 5 line structure, Was almost like a dance in its self. Flowing like movement just wow

[Jordan A. Wilson]

I like everything about this poem. The rhyme scheme, the structure, everything.

[Kuhr Gred]

so lovely.. i love this.. i love music the way how it spoke when it comes to instrument specially in piano (based on my opinion) hahah.. thanks for sharing
- Kuhr Gred

[Perfect Mistake]

Ahh this is a lovely piece of work. Great job :3

[allie_arrowz]

It does sometimes feel like a dance. Pretty poem. I like the idea of it being whispered

[Harley (arbiter)]

Nice work! Love. The dance goes on even if we screw up. The wheel in the sky keeps on turning. Bet you know what song that it. Great write