Curious

try it all

Geisha lips and perky tits;
manhood tucked between his legs.
Put on a show for us to see;
don't laugh at me, he begs.
~
Time to go, 
no one will know

what we did tonight.

Just you and me,
i came to see
my curiosity ignite.

Touching you,
feeling you,
caressing what's not mine.

I have it too.
you feel so good;
nothing did you decline.

Curious, i said.
I'll show you, you spread;
your manhood as big as mine.

I feasted tonight
on your glorious sight;
my taste in pleasures i did refine.

Reviews

[demureminds]

I like this poem in a strange way mainly because I'm not used to reading this type of stuff. But this one portrays a sort of promiscuous character as if he were also shy and normally reserved, but passion and curiosity takes over him. Although, I'm not sure if my interpretation is correct... It also flowed really nice and walks you through the scenario. Great piece.

[Lily Mae]

Living out a fantasy makes the blood sear through the body.. passion, want, need and lust refined:)

[GunMetal]

This was interesting and the subject matter is really unique. Not many people are willing to write about an encounter like this. It's that boldness that makes you such a great read. Well done.

[Mackenzie Brooke]

I like this alot, i agree with Jordan very thought provoking.

[Jordan A. Wilson]

very thought provoking

[daemok]

I really liked how bold you are, it shows that there's an artist that wants to burst out and cross the lines where people are more comfortable at staying quiet. I myself love anything that makes others cringe or go into shock.
I only wish that you had added another line to the last piece, something incorperated from the beginning. Just because I'm picky like that. XP

[Laura Maidah]

Tits up. Nice one.

Last line is forced. The "I did refine" inversion is pretty blaring in disparity to the rest of the vignette. Very different, like it's only purposed to maintain rhyme scheme slash meter

[w]

because it is. I'm trying to fix it. Got any suggestions?

[w]

I just got the "Tits Up" comment. I am slow it seems.

[Destinyxi]

Haha this poem is nice, it has a fast pace but I like it. Like the story behind it too, kinda sexy, kinda different, good job!

[~LadyWolf~]

Good job.

[That_Girl]

I like the poem quite a bit. Not sure if the capitalization errors were on purpose or not but I figured I'd point out that there were some... again, could be a reason for them. :)

[w]

Just an oversight from transposition. Thank you.