++sleeper++

as the sun diminishes into the west and

  permafrost mantles the shrinking land i


seek stygian deepnesses never known

  delving ever down that i may find a


bed of cold marl and damp stone

  i will lay in abeyance there until all


memory fades of the works of men

  till eons uncounted at last unfurl the
 

seas once risen subside and then

  something beautiful might rise anon from


those forgotten depths unplumbed again

  into the light from this dark chrysalis

Author's Note

sorry kitty i changed it after your review :P
this one fights back

Reviews

[Joseph D. Smith]

Beautiful use of language! It kind of has that William Shatner feeling to it, as you go to the next line. My only problem is that this poem is too advanced for my own reading level, but I know in my heart that you wrote this the way you intended.

Great job!

[Tkess]

Beautifully done. I love the line, "memory fades of the works of men, till eons uncounted at last unfurl

[Nobody.]

Classic dark. In my head, I could hear Vincent Price reading this aloud.....I can't think of a higher compliment than that. Good stuff!
Cheers!

[Matthew Kult]

I am probably going to repeat the sentiment of the crowd, but great word use and flow. Very vivid and dark.

Matthew

[An owl on the moon]

What a depth to your work... it drifts us over the eons of time.. the vastness of space.. yet is so personal.. so powerful. It is a song of life...

[Ruth]

Unique and outstanding imagery love..you are a dab hand at metaphorical brilliance!
Light to be reborn from such depths..not taken lightly but possible!
Wonderful work
xx

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

dream like metamorphic prailine mantle parable~ within without the cycles shift~ graceful imagery with diamond tipped descriptives~