The Black Ocean

The Black Ocean

A Poem by KnightOfAnarchy
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A poem about suicide, originally published under the user ilovescarystories On Deepunderground poetry. I did write this poem though and it is one of my most recent.

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The black ocean
She swam with her head bobbing in and out of the waters.
With the icy waves that pulled her down.
She swam into the ocean.
She swam into the ocean.
She let the icy waves pull her down.
And let her hair fall back in the water.
The ice that forms on her throat.
The snow that formed crystals on her hair.
She sat back and let the waves pound.
She looked down into the ocean.
To see it's black sapphire silk.
Her tears rolled down creating bubbles.
Her hair rolled down.
Two blank eyes staring down.
She let the waves pile against her.
She let the icy waters pull her down.
She swam into the ocean.
She swam into the ocean.
Right beneath the waves.
So did he struggle when he pulled her out.
He held.
And so did his warm tears melt the ice off her cheek.
He pushed back the waters.
And did they calm down?
As the waters fell around.
She opened her eyes.
And the waves fell down.
His black wings spread across the sky
As he led her back to shore.
With her frozen hand.
Eyes milky white.
I'd say he saved her life.

© 2016 KnightOfAnarchy


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the ending was great... your set up to the poem was great and it was simply wonderful to read...there is pain in it and hopelessness but you made it eye catching by giving it a sweet ending as he saved her life.... full ratings....

Posted 8 Years Ago


Inject Positivity

8 Years Ago

its alright....visit on my poetry street when you find time dear frnd....
KnightOfAnarchy

8 Years Ago

Well I have time today so I will try tonight ^^
Inject Positivity

8 Years Ago

will feel humbled.... thank you frnd....
One of the best things I've read about suicide . . . & I've read dozens, since I've had a lifelong interest. Your ongoing analogies are well blended & united into a single powerful message. Not a jolt along the way! It's always good to have a glimmer of hope at the end of a bleak write. You've done this gently, realistically, without it feeling a bit like manufactured drama or the fanfare of false hope. Nice job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


KnightOfAnarchy

8 Years Ago

Aw thank you for your amazing review ! ^^
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sam
That was truly amazing. You have a great gift and i can't wait to see what else you write

Posted 8 Years Ago


KnightOfAnarchy

8 Years Ago

Aw thank you ^-^ anything you would like a review of?
sam

8 Years Ago

your welcome :) anything that catches your attention is fine thank you
Very beautiful poem here KnightOfAnarchy. truly beautiful. 100/100

Posted 8 Years Ago


Tsubaki Kuro

8 Years Ago

Which story do you want to read, i'll change the rating.
KnightOfAnarchy

8 Years Ago

Which ever you like the most?
Tsubaki Kuro

8 Years Ago

ok I changed most of them to teen. Read: My inner hell teaser and Entering Hell

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Hi there, I'm a 15 year old girl from the USA. I'm a creepypasta writer but also a poetry writer. I came here because I love people, and I love writing so win win ^-^ I used to not be able to rea.. more..

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