Come

This song was written in memoriam of a friend who took his own life. No one knew he was fighting with depression until his battle was lost and a pair of young eyes were shut forever.

I can hear the words,

repeating in my head,

i know that it hurts,

but i'm just going mad.

I can hear a scream,

someone weeping Help me,

maybe it's just a dream,

everyone just leave me.

Come and help me,

come and take me,

somewhere there is no pain,

somewhere you can only gain,

i'm helpless

hear me,

come and take me, kill me,

so i can move on.

I can see the knife,

blood on my hands,

i can feel no life,

going through my veins, 

I can see the blood,

heartbeat slowing down,

my tears are like flood,

my soul is bound.

I can hear a scream,

someone weeping Help me,

maybe it's just a dram,

everyone just leave me.

Come and help me,

come and take me,

somewhere there is no pain,

somewhere you can only gain,

i'm helpless

hear me,

come and take me, kill me,

so i can move on.

I hear a scream,

I AM weeping help me,

maybe it's just a dram,

life gave up on me.

Author's Note

I would appreciate any kind of feedback on my work.

Reviews

[Serendipity Planet]

sad and powerful , beautiful song

[Tina Vainola]

Do not hate me for this, but in my opinion the repeating verse makes your poem feel like lyrics for a song. I am not a poet, but I think without it your poem will be much stronger. Purely subjective.

[Scarlett]

thank you for your opinion. I have written this song while i was playing something on my guitar so it turned out to be something that can be sang with music in the background.