birthday wish

for my wife on her birthday

my lover's birthday

no mere gift can satisfy

my wish for her: joy

Author's Note

Hahaha! Her response:
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Thank you. That's very sweet. It's like the sayings on one of those cards that you open up and find something like, "which is why I'm giving you this card instead of a gift." Sorry. You write in haiku, and I write in Hallmark Saturdays cards. It was a nice haiku...

How about this one:
My lover's present
He attempts to bring me joy
My response is: sass
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Yep. That's my girl.

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Hi Mason,

This is a nice haiku. My wife, too, is unimpressed by my poetry. She acknowledges that some of it is pretty good, but she especially hates "Boundless Love", the love poem I wrote about her. I think she knows that we both (and our relationship) is more "real", complicated, and at times difficult, than can be painted in a poem, and it's that to which she objects. She has a point, but still I feel the poem.

So go get her a nice present!

Best regards,

Rick

[Mark]

Y'all sound like you have a great relationship! I wrote "Metamorphosis" for my wife's birthday, some ten years ago; funny, alas, was not my goal! (as it was not yours!) Her response? "I didn't know frogs had shells!"

[Mandi]

aw that's nice! And i liked that it was straighttt to the pointt!!!!!!!!!! :) Keep it up! :):):):)