growing up

reality bites
drawing blood from fragile dreams
my inner child slain

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Mason,

Another wonderful haiku. And I have to agree with my good friend Mark--ah, growing up. It's so hard. One thing you might consider, I thought that "drains" might work better than "slain" for the last word. Just a slightly different slant that I thought I'd suggest. The haiku works well either way.

Best regards,

Rick

[Mason Vail]

4 years late, but in response to Rick's observation: I do think that "slain" could be replaced by "drained." It still fits the blood-sucking imagery, but leaves the door open to the inner child's stubborn (courageous?) survival.

[Mark]

Growing up, eh? I was warned about that! When your "Have To's" must take precedence
over your "Want To's". Yet, while there are certainly drawbacks, now, as I approach childhood
from the opposite perspective, I've found that adulthood had certain perquisites that
compensated me for the loss of those once treasured childhood freedoms!