I'm feeling like...

I’m feeling like…

 

 

 

I’m feeling like there’s nothing left for me.

I’m feeling like there’s no point in me trying to be.

Like all I want to do right now is rest in peace

Even though I’ve never held a good place in my heart for the deceased.

A sad feeling, it lies at the pit of my heart.

But I guess it was always there, from the miserable start.

I look nervously into my contemptuous hell

Wishing, pleading, that this depression does not dwell

Its voice sweet like velvet, it whispers to me in the night,

But, Kristen, I’m your friend, it says

And I’ll be here until your tragic end.

And I think, why not just give in,

And commit the desired sin?

There’s no one around

It will hurt, but it will be too quick for anyone to hear the sound

Why not? Why can’t I just end it all?

But then I answer my own question: I don’t have the gall.

I can’t do it. I’m scared. I don’t have the nerve.

But now, I’m just thinking:

Until I get over this fear, this little plan of mines will be on the reserve.

 

Author's Note

That title is under construction. I only put that there for lack of a much better title. I want to change it. I was never any good at making titles. If you have any ideas, tell me in your reviews. This is how I feel, so this is what I wrote. Obviously, I'm not feeling very happy. I feel empty almost.

Reviews

[Jonathan De Elvira]

Well...my suggestion for the title would be "Empty...Thoughtlessness."...
but that's just me and if you take it straight away it would sound like my work instead...

This write was okay, I guess many people could easily be relate with this...
nice write

[Jocelin]

This is very good in my opinion... it shows the emotional parts in this text. I would give you 10 out of 10 for this write. keep writing :)

[Rose Tyler]

This write is alright, anda title I propose for it is "Empty Hell"

[(JR) Joshua Hernandez]

wow, great poem

[heich]

love it..

[Cheyenne]

Life isnt easy... But there is happiness too if you dont go through with life you will be missed and never reach your full potential. Sometimes death seems more appealing than life but thats not true...

[bluessadmood]

I know its the question that keep hitting us from the beginning..
if the minute we see life,we know how the end will be ,so whats the point
if the end is the same ,so whats the point taking all the trouble and wait for
wait for that moment to come..why not just bring it right along
and finish with everything..its reasonable why we ever wait
but dear..have not you seen..sometimes we are struck with beauty
you just feel dizzy and say like me..Oh life how wonderful you are
i will always chase life like a fool..i know the end ,but till then
let me live,let me live it all,want to see more beauty
and help,lots need my help..lots now depend on me
i will do all i can ,i will try to make everyone smile or even laugh
i will try make everyone remember me,so by the time,all will say
look the fool has died..but what a fool ,they will all cry and try to
remember to live every moment they could recall living with that fool
for he brought us lots of life though he always knew he is going to die
how you make me think ,like i will never stop
lovely write..

[KL]

You should've been more consistent with the rhyme scheme. It was AABB for the longest time and then halfway through you changed it up randomly and threw it off. You also need to work on making the syllable count a little more efficient - it was all over the place here and hindered flow. Overall, it seems a little basic for a potentially complex topic... keep working on it.

[Alex Thomas]

We all feel desolate sometimes. We all feel hopeless, but as tempting as it may seem, death is never a solution. As for a title, "Empty Temptation" or something...

[Andrew Wright]

I see what you meant about getting hang of the rhyming... you're starting to sound like me! ^.^ I hope that this can pass soon.

[Ruth]

Fear is the harshest emotion I feel!
This is poignant love and heartfelt
xx