The end

The end

 

Bruised,

Bleeding,

Arms covered in her distress

 

Pain,

It hurts,

Her tears spill down on her tattered dress

 

This isn’t the life she wanted

Hell, she only wanted love

 

Not only that,

Love, affection, wealth, a sense of pride

All of the above.

 

Is this what you want?

She screams to the heavens

 

She sinks to the floor,

Her cries are for that of a

Fellow named Devon.

 

But what does he care if I’m hurting?

She continuously asks

 

Deeper and deeper into her

Depression she basks.

 

The dark room is cold

She should’ve listened to all the things she’s

Been told.

 

She’s worthless,

She’ll never amount to a thing.

 

She only wants to be loved,

Above everything.

 

But it seems she won’t even get that

Ha, no surprise.

 

All there’s left to do now,

Is wait and wait as she slowly dies.

 

Devon is left wondering what he did wrong

Unfortunately for him, he wasn’t smart

He didn’t open his eyes.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

This is kind of a compilation of False Affection and Twisted Revenge. I tried to fit those two in here. Like a sequel of some sort or something. Hope you liked it. =]

Reviews

[Gianna Perry]

Another incredible piece you've produced. Sam is right, you have a way of conveying your (or perhaps someone else's?) emotions through poetry. There's a strong message that, again, I agree with Sam on. She's right when she says that there aren't too many people looking out for you out there, which is a terrible thing to think about. Once you find that one person who you know is always going to take care of you, it'll all be better. There's no use in killing yourself over someone who's not meant to be... I'm not disagreeing with the ideas portrayed here at all, just rambling on...

The rhyme scheme is fantastic (I'm running out of adjectives to describe this...) and a very good way to draw in the reader. It's a good hook. Overall, another amazing piece. *APPLAUSE!*

~Gianna (but still Shayna on the inside :)

[Snickers]

I liked it, very impressive. Keep it up

With love,

Dream xoxox

[dovetailer]

It's not that we want a lot in life...just one choice tidbit or two
to make us feel like we're taking up a lot of space for nothing...
life beats us so that we'd be happy with what we consider to be
the bare minimum...sure we'd love to have more...we probably deserve more...
who wouldn't like a fancy ride
or see the ocean pound from our windows...
but just to believe in our heart "we belong here...''
is that too much to ask...Devon...
Hey, girl...you aren't alone...
they say these are character-building experiences...
Take it from me...no one needs that much character...lol
very true sentiments...

[Veronica]

:( So sad...but I liked it alot! Deep emotion!

[David W Moore III]

desperate. hopeless and bleak. these emotions jumped off the page. very emotive. nicely written