The Dancing Queen

The Dancing Queen

 

 

The way she moves under the stars,

Makes me want to join her.

 

Her skin, illuminated by the beam

That is the moonlight, glistens in the night.

 

I hide in the shadows, as quiet and as still

As a mouse, careful not to disturb her.

Because this is a moment unlike any other.

Like a frightened animal, if I interfere, it will

Be gone in the blink of an eye, I am sure.

 

Her twisting and leaping body leaves me

In awe. As I continue to gaze on, I feel

Within me an indescribable hunger that I can’t

Quite seem to place.

 

Is it for the graceful beauty before me?

I am not certain. But I just have to...

No, I must keep watching.

 

For, if I look away I am positive that

I will be most frustrated at my pearls

Vainly cast before swine.

 

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Author's Note

All wrong. Ugh. What do you think of it?

Reviews

[EverEmma]

Its not wrong at all, its like a storyboard for movie. You are replaying a scene in your head of a...well...a dancing queen! Its simple but there is something slightly magical about this piece. Very very pretty, I can almost see here now! :)

- Your friend and fellow writer,

EverEmma

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very good. I could see the graceful beauty. Your words create a vision of beauty and a secret. The ending was outstanding. Thank you for the poem.
Coyote

[(JR) Joshua Hernandez]

very nice, I really like it nice job

[Lexi]

Wrong? No. This painted a beautiful picture in my head.
A wonderful piece.

[FocusedAmnesia]

I like the format, how you cut the sentences. It really helps to paint the picture, and add that with your descriptive words, and this piece is the definition of imagery. Great read.

[Alex Thomas]

You can see this scene before you. A powerful emotion of beauty and grace. Indescribably and simplistically beautiful verse.

[Cassiopia Summers]

I agree with EverEmma.
It is magical. I can see the whole thing play before my eyes as if I was in the bushes too. The glistening snow, her twirling while the pale moonlight is upon here. Wonderful, absolutely wonderful.

[Michael X]

such a smooth rendition, great prose, and shadowy in meaning which
adds to the ending line dramatics, the flow is quite excellent,
what struck me is the depth of the metaphor. draws upon focused
thoughts as well, over all, sentimentally intellectualized, awsome