The Dancing Queen

The Dancing Queen

 

 

The way she moves under the stars,

Makes me want to join her.

 

Her skin, illuminated by the beam

That is the moonlight, glistens in the night.

 

I hide in the shadows, as quiet and as still

As a mouse, careful not to disturb her.

Because this is a moment unlike any other.

Like a frightened animal, if I interfere, it will

Be gone in the blink of an eye, I am sure.

 

Her twisting and leaping body leaves me

In awe. As I continue to gaze on, I feel

Within me an indescribable hunger that I can’t

Quite seem to place.

 

Is it for the graceful beauty before me?

I am not certain. But I just have to...

No, I must keep watching.

 

For, if I look away I am positive that

I will be most frustrated at my pearls

Vainly cast before swine.

 

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Author's Note

All wrong. Ugh. What do you think of it?

Reviews

[EverEmma]

Its not wrong at all, its like a storyboard for movie. You are replaying a scene in your head of a...well...a dancing queen! Its simple but there is something slightly magical about this piece. Very very pretty, I can almost see here now! :)

- Your friend and fellow writer,

EverEmma

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think the storyline is really good. I like the way you can see the dancer in your head. And the title reminds me of the song Dancing Queen by ABBA. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Forever Mine]

I absolutly love this! I can clearly picture this girl dancing in a field at night and somebody learking in the shadows behind plants and trees just watching her. Amazing !

[Nia Shand]

wrong!? No! More like amazing! This now is one of my favorite poems :]

[KaySea]

very nice. well done

[al25]

Didn't really get what this was about.

[Anas]

Very nice :) Not wrong at all!

[Bridget Mcmaken]

Wrong? This is a wonder piece, you writen it well. It's far from wrong its wonderful. Keep up the amazing work, I truly think you'll get somewhere with your work. I love this poem it stands out to me. Have a great day. ^_^

[Ruth]

Wrong? lol - beg to differ lol This is lovely! All glitter and glamour faded, jaded and rusted!
This is excellent!
xx

[Andrew Wright]

Wrong? of course not. I'm sorry, I'm afraid, that you can do no wrong. At least here, because that wass amazing. I feel like the main character here... I'm afraid that this will stop. please don't let it.

[Cynthia]

That's nice! Love this!