Murder

Love kills.

Murder

 

Blood seeping to the floor,

Your eyes are cutting me to the core

The smell of death is in the air

Just the sight of you seems too much to bear

You say goodbye with a kiss upon thy cheek

I don't think I've ever felt so weak.

I’m slipping fast now, almost gone

It brings such sadness to know that I’ll never see another dawn.

 

 

 

Author's Note

Just so you know, I always capitalize the start of every line in my poems. Well, Microsoft Word does it but I don't change it. I like it that way. Hope you like it. Tell me what you were thinking when you read this.

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this was good. I have always been a fan of this type of thing. I watch shows about it as well. I also liked the imagery to the poem. It made me feel like I was the one that's blood was seeping to the floor. I don't like murder though. I would never kill anyone. It's the thought of me going into forensics and stuff that keeps me interested in stuff like this. Going into my favorites. Thanks for sharing.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. Death is always a good topic to write a story. I like the emotion and the final thoughts. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Snickers]

Wow, so much tense emotion. Did the guy love her, that killed her or him or ah, >.< Anyways, really good, I liked it, I hope no one ever gets murdered.

[dovetailer]

I've often wondered what I would feel as I exsanguinate...would I feel cold like they say in the movies? And to be watched by my killer as I slip away...powerless...
Creepy thoughts...but it makes the poem grip me in the gut...
I liked it...

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

I really like this. Its like murder of the soul. Not murder of ur physical being. Nice. Very very good.

[nono]

This is really really good! I like this a lot! Nice job!!

[David W Moore III]

The metaphoric murder is concieved and committed with brilliance. Going ever gentle into the night but with a shove from your love (sorry about the rhyme there). Well done.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

sounds deliciously done psycho thriller...
hurm....But I love the sensation in that kind of situation...just like old times.....with him....

good..I loved it...

[Alex Thomas]

Not as dark as most poems about death. It's a little sad. The rhythm is slightly off at the end. An excellent poem.

[deeps]

This is so powerful, like the write.