Wonderland

Wonderland is such a beautiful place.

I wish I could stay there.

It’s much better than real life

Even though there’s this Jabberwocky

That I have to slay and a horrid red queen

Who has the biggest head I’ve ever see

In the shape of a heart.

My friend, the mad hatter, could do a dance

Where his head spun all the way around

When he talked, I giggled;

The crazy things he would say.

Things were going fine,

Things were quite dandy,

I was finally happy,

Until I woke up in a cold sweat

And I realized I was just dreaming.

 

Author's Note

I know, it doesn't flow much like a poem. Hope you like it. Oh, and thanks Rachel! I changed the Jabberwocky spelling. (:

Reviews

[J.S. Pua]

i think..
it would have been better..
if you put your own touch to it..
'cause this poem turned out to be a summary of AIW..
(but that's just me..)
other than that..
this is quite a good poem, like what the others said..
and the colors add up to the poem..

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this version. More direct and a lot shorter then watching the movie.. We all need a personal wonderland to find peace. A interesting tale.
Coyote

[~Z]

I've done that before. ;3

~z

[deeps]

I enjoyed this write alot. It's wonderful and lovely.
I like the begining word, very colorful and adds to the write.

[Kelly Taylor]

I rather like this. The imagery as always is great. :D

[Ruth]

This is lovely, to stay in that wonderland would be great! lol Know the feeling
xx

[Rachel 6sixtrümper]

very nice! im a huge AIW fan, not the movie but the books and the only comment i have to make is that it is spelled jabberwocky :)

[Loner]

I do honestly i do like it because its pure and honest like yr poem nicely written and expressed . I thought of ALICE IN WONDERLAND while reading yr poem, good work.