Witch

Witch

 

You take me on a ride on your broomstick through the night

You assure me that everything will be alright

While we glide through the clouds of the sky

I begin to think of how you lied

You never told me you were a witch

Now I wonder why that makes me twitch

Of course you won’t hurt me, you’re my friend

If I ask you if you’re evil, it might offend

We are dipping now, through the stars and the fog

Down low, almost on land, we barely bypass the smog

You whisk me back home and I crawl in bed

You tuck me away safely in my bedspread

A kiss, you bestow on my head and wish thee farewell

Now, I’m not so afraid that you’re a witch and you cook spells.   

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

My pathetic attempt at writing a rhyme scheme poem. Hope you like it.

Reviews

[FocusedAmnesia]

Nice read. I like the font. The rhyming didn't seem in-your-face, like you tried to hard; it flowed nicely.

[Bridget Mcmaken]

this is a great poem, It's far from pathetic!!! it's awesome work.

[ShaneBerry]

this is no pathetic attempt, this is a vry good and very creative write with a very exciteing and different rhym scheme!

[J.S. Pua]

it's a decent attempt, i think..
the piece has good meaning..
good work..

[deeps]

A wonderful write here

[Kelly Taylor]

The rhyming is great, don't worry about that. I like the descriptions and it's a very creative poem. The last line is neat, too.

[Ashley.M.E]

The rhyming set aside I think the poem is alright. I mean a little out of season, but the poem has nice meaning.

[Jennifer Neuman]

I think the rhyming in some places takes away from the meaning, but all in all this is a nice simplistic poem. Keep it up, I love to read your work!

[Alex Thomas]

Sweet little poem. The rhyme scheme takes away slightly from the message of this poem. In its simplicity, it almost has a deeper message of trusting your friends not matter what.

[Rachel 6sixtrümper]

this was wonderful!!