When I first started reading this there were a mixture of emotions. As the first three stanza's made me think you liked the butterflies thats why you didn't want to forget about the day in at the museum. And the first stanza your describing them as "Flying, Beautiful, Terrifying creatures" which made me think you felt sorry for the butterflys being so timid of everything. The thrid stanza describing the butterflies free from their cages, that made me think you were trying to get a point across that animals shouldn't be kept in cages. Then you panicked when they landed on you which made me sense the mixture of emotions. You also describe the butterflies " terrifying little beauties" this might be a oxymoron or maybe just mixed emotions from you. You also describe the butterflies as "harmless little beasts" another oxymoron could have been used here but why would you panic if you knew they were harmless. The way you describe the butterflies gives me a sense of mixed emotions like the line "I dodged every other one of those monsters that came my way" gives me a sense of how you don't like them but some lines make feel you do like them.
Yeah, up close they're kind of creepy looking. *off topic*
I like the imagery you created in this poem - you're really good at doing that. Also, there's still emotion in it too, and the oxymoron "terrifyingly beautiful creatures" is a pretty interesting take on it.
When I first started reading this there were a mixture of emotions. As the first three stanza's made me think you liked the butterflies thats why you didn't want to forget about the day in at the museum. And the first stanza your describing them as "Flying, Beautiful, Terrifying creatures" which made me think you felt sorry for the butterflys being so timid of everything. The thrid stanza describing the butterflies free from their cages, that made me think you were trying to get a point across that animals shouldn't be kept in cages. Then you panicked when they landed on you which made me sense the mixture of emotions. You also describe the butterflies " terrifying little beauties" this might be a oxymoron or maybe just mixed emotions from you. You also describe the butterflies as "harmless little beasts" another oxymoron could have been used here but why would you panic if you knew they were harmless. The way you describe the butterflies gives me a sense of mixed emotions like the line "I dodged every other one of those monsters that came my way" gives me a sense of how you don't like them but some lines make feel you do like them.
This is really well written, and believe it or not your not the only person who I know who is terrified of butterflies. One of my ex-girlfriends was deathly afraid of them. But I really like the structure of your poem, good work.
Bless!
You know, there are things sthat scare people that people do not think! The emotion in this piece of wrtiting is wonderfully written and exorcised!
xx
Interesting structure. No definite flow to it. I like the lack of rhyme. Isn't it funny how bizarre some fears are? I'm actually quite terrified of public lavatories. And no, I'm not joking.
Butterflies actually are kind of scary! One landed on my nose in kindergarten one time, and it flapped it's REALLY BIG wings and both of them poked me in the eyes. No joke.
I really like the structure of the poem, it was very well written! You portrayed your emotion towards the butterflies exceptionally, well done!
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