Butterflies

Flying,
Beautiful,
Terrifying creatures.

As a young girl,
I went to a butterfly museum
on a school field trip.

I'll never forget that day
these colorful, fragile
little things with wings
were flying in the open
air as I entered the spacious
place.

Cages were forbidden
They were free
They could rest
and perch anywhere they pleased.
They didn't have a care in
the world.

A few of them landed on my
shoulder, my chest, and my
arms, and I panicked.

My cousin was there and
she laughed and pointed
as I flailed and screamed
doing anything to get these
terrifying little beauties
off of me.

It worked.
Frightened, they fluttered away
only to land on someone else
and, me, I dodged every other
one of those monsters that
came my way.

After it all ended, and we were
loading back on the school bus,
I was relieved that those harmless
little beasts weren't anywhere near
me anymore.

Those Flying
Terrifyingly
Beautiful
Creatures.

Author's Note

Don't laugh. Butterflies really do scare me. *hides*

Reviews

[R E Tree]

When I first started reading this there were a mixture of emotions. As the first three stanza's made me think you liked the butterflies thats why you didn't want to forget about the day in at the museum. And the first stanza your describing them as "Flying, Beautiful, Terrifying creatures" which made me think you felt sorry for the butterflys being so timid of everything. The thrid stanza describing the butterflies free from their cages, that made me think you were trying to get a point across that animals shouldn't be kept in cages. Then you panicked when they landed on you which made me sense the mixture of emotions. You also describe the butterflies " terrifying little beauties" this might be a oxymoron or maybe just mixed emotions from you. You also describe the butterflies as "harmless little beasts" another oxymoron could have been used here but why would you panic if you knew they were harmless. The way you describe the butterflies gives me a sense of mixed emotions like the line "I dodged every other one of those monsters that came my way" gives me a sense of how you don't like them but some lines make feel you do like them.

[ebonpinion]

*smile* even the simplest things can scare us. It's a good write. I loved that this wasn't on a typical fear.

[Aikaterine]

I'm terrified of butterflies, too. You caught how obscene and yet unavoidable this fear can be. Lovely poem.

[TeenRomance2]

HaHa! That was so cute! I love it! :-D

[Coyote Poetry]

Each of us are scare of something. I like this story. Most folks are scare of spiders. All spiders are safe. They want nothing to do with the human race. But the fear they have. Your story is very good. . A excellent poem. Made me laugh this morning.
Coyote

[Onyx_Rayne]

This is really cute and the words bring out some cute imagery.

The flow is pretty good and it was an enjoyable read.

Don't be embarrassed to be frightened of butterflies just because they are beautiful - I love butterflies, but... I'm afraid of birds so...haha

Great write ;)

[KaySea]

very good work

[Jessica]

But they are so beautiful :)
This is a very sweet poem. I liked how you described them. Very good write :)

[Daydreamer54]

OK I'll try not too! What an awesome memory though! I loved the part when you said that the butterflies were free from their cage and can roam whereever! That must have been a beautiful sight! *sigh* Anyway nice and amusing write! :P

[Hamkar]

I'm only scared of butterflies because their legs remind me of spiders which are creepy crawlies which I have a big fear of crawling on me. I know it is a big chain but still it freaks me out. My grandfather used to have lots of butterflies, and he gave me some chrysalises, I loved them, until they hatched (do chrysalises hatch?). Great poem, I relate right to it.

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nice-a great narrative poem
with superb flow and imagery-
love this---magnificent poetry!!!

james:-)