Love With a Twist

SOMETIMES, Someone Says Something really SMALL but it FITS Right into this EMPTY SPACE… in the heart…

Everytime I close my eyes

I always have this dream

Where I could be with you

And you would love me too

 

Every single day of my life

From that time I laid my eyes on you

I can’t help but have this feeling

Building up inside me ready to burst

 

I always look forward

To Tuesdays and Fridays at school

Because then, I’ll get the chance to see you

At that same spot with your friends

 

Then I wish nights would have been longer

So I would forever repeat those wonders

Of the magic within my fantasy

Where reality is most unlikely

 

Just a glimpse of your face

And a glance to your side

Makes me the happiest person on Earth

A moment waiting for remembrance

 

I do not know how it’d come to this

You are two years younger than me

An uncertainty I’ve had

Although age does not make a difference in love

 

I’m a science major

You’re a literature student

Can we blend together in terms of intellect?

Put one and one to make two sets of minds?

 

A lot of worries are ahead

So little time to spare

I wonder if in another space and time

Will it be you who’s living my life?

 

I try to hide this agitation

Whenever you pass me by

The way I try to look at you

Cannot hide these thoughts I’ve had

 

One time, when I was eating

With my best friend at the café

How can I ever forget that special day?

Where you finally look at my way

 

But then again, doubts and anxiety overtook me

Maybe he knew, what should I do?

He’ll certainly avoid me in the future

Sounds like a stalker thing to do

 

I didn’t look at him

For fear of whatever lies ahead

That’s when my best friend told me

What I unexpectedly wanted to hear

 

“I think he was waiting

For you to return that glance

Maybe, confirm something else

Like admiration which a crush would do

 

The wisdom behind those words

Never seem to fail me at that

And I hope, one day, I’ll have the courage

To face my true love and tell him what I feel

 

Happy Valentine’s Day!

Author's Note

So it's a little early for Valentine's Day. But hey, it doesn't matter if you're in love,right? I'm just going through a little bit of anxiety whenever I see my crush and I hope I won't do crazy things in front of him. Hope this gets away anytime now. Feel free to share your thoughts about what you're feeling when the person you love/like is just a short distance from you.:>

Reviews

[beautiful dreamer]

great poem!

[Margarette]

Thank you so much!

[Acer]

Another great poem, well written.

[Margarette]

Thank you for reading! I'm glad you like it.

[khalid]

what an epic! it floods with love and passion in empty hearts like a river flooding with cold sweet water in the middle of the desert at a summer's hot noon..

[Margarette]

Thank you! haha.. Love your imagery of love and devotion.

[kublakhan27]

In every year of school I attended, I wound up in at at least one class with a girl that would catch my eye and leave me smitten for the duration of that year...in two of those years I actually found the nerve to spill my guts to the girl in question only to find out that she was not single, but in both cases, I never seen them with another guy anywhere else, even around town...but that's me, and I often made myself look really ridiculous in the company of these girls so I was probably asking for it haha Your situation sounds different though...I never had one of those cafe episodes to derive a feeling of hope from...I have hope for you...anyways I only mention this stuff in response to your comments haha The poem itself is a wonderfully crafted piece and full of charm...well done, and good luck :)

[Margarette]

I've never tried confessing to someone. I remembered that I got two people who were interested in me when I was in high school and it's really nice to know that there's someone out there who thinks you're very special to them. Even though the person is not your type, just a simple return of the love through appreciation will make it unforgettable for them. I also remembered when I was in sixth grade, my classmate was the one who told my crush about what I feel about him. It turned out okay but then, I was just a child so it's just playful love back then. But now, since I'm an adult, it's different. I suppose it's because I'm aging?
haha..Anyway, I'll be rooting for you to find your true love and special person. I'm sure there is already a time and place where that will happen. Thank you for your thoughts!

[kublakhan27]

Ah yes, I remember when I was around that age, maybe fourth or fifth grade, when I liked the girl across the street, and we wound up hanging out together but it was like you said, just two kids haha Things are definitely different now...but I wish you luck as well and I hope you two get together :)

[Margarette]

Ah yes, puppy love was it? Thanks again! Wonderful things happen for a reason and a better future lies ahead of us.

[kublakhan27]

I"m just glad I moved not long after cuz it would have been really awkward once I got older haha I agree :)

[Trigorin]

Very typical and generic topic, but you've managed to breathe a spark of originality into it, so well done for that. I like your imagery the quality of internal dialogue that's present in this poem, it fits very well with the content and has that sort of hopeful/waiting vibe I think you were going for. You describe very well the angst all sorts of young people have at college, especially around this time of year, and it feels like you were writing from your heart. One thing I'd say would be to just go back over it and think about if it's what you really wanted to come across with this piece, because in some parts it felt as though your heart wasn't really in it, to be frank.
It's still a very good effort on your part, well done.

[Margarette]

At first, it's really just some sort of admiration I felt for that person and I thought that maybe, the feelings would disappear after our semestral break. But then, it didn't. It only grew larger and that's how I hope that it shouldn't have gotten any stronger than this.

[Summer'sBreeze]

Wonderful write!
:)

[Margarette]

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it!

[Jack...]

Very nice and I would thin, if he is a lit major, then this should accidentally (on purpose) fall into his hands. Annonymously of course, but he should be able to figure it out. Nice.

[Margarette]

I love that idea but it's really impossible for that to happen since he's always with his friends. Maybe, I should convince one of hi professors to give the poem to him. haha!!

[Jack...]

It would be cool if you could convince one of his profeesors to discuss the poem in class.

[Margarette]

Hahaha..Yeah, that would be great! They will analyze every single element of art included in the poem. It would be nice if he knew it is for him.

[Jack...]

I have been thinking about this, why not mail it to him, put it in an envelope, stamp it and mail it to him. No card, no signature just the poem. That shuld really pique his interest and then in passing, memorizes a couple of lines and just say them when he can hear. But don't give it away too much. You are a gorgeous girl, I'm sure once he looks your way he will not look anywhere else.

[Margarette]

Oh that's a lot of thought and I think your idea's great! the problem is, I don't know where he lives.:(
It could have been better if he was around my age so info like that will be easily pass on.

[Jack...]

Well just trying...