Slayer!

Sordid    Salvation
Weaving Cobweb
Of          Red
Revolts   Espousing
Dreadful Askance
Slaying   Men.

Reviews

[RDOriginal]

This is pretty powerful and very abstract. I agree with Poppy that it's a nice technique whereby you can choose to read either horizonatally or vertically and still get a true feeling for the poem. I love the alliteration of 'sordid salvation' and 'red revolts' too! Not so sure of the word 'askance' though, it seems a little weak in comparison with the rest of the piece (i.e. we have this powerful sordid, killing, cancer like presence - a wholly evil thing but the you point out it also spreads an element of distrust/suspicion...) Maybe just my reading of it. A very nice, experimental write :)

[The Uncommon Muse]

nice technique on this one, some of your alliterations are quite powerful. I'm not sure of the use of askance, but overall great work

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Wow - succinct and moving - powerful in its simplicity and depth at the same time!
Light,
SiddARTha

[Ruth]

This is stunning!
Truly!
The structure is unique and the poem can be read at both sides and yet at the same time!
Excellent:)
xx

[R E Tree]

I get good imagery from this. I like the line "slaying men" and "red revolts". The words work well together.

[KatiePie]

That was powerful, short but so sweet. A passionate write :) very beautiful.

[Crowley]

Short an very resourceful. Nice big subject for so few words. Had a bit of power to it and the structre lent an added dimension. I kliked this.

[Kanattas Atir Enomo]

nice poem. short, but powerful and full of meaning. i liked the way it's set up,. two words per line. good job