Quest-Haiku

In a quest of my "self".

Promenading pain
scornfully asks,"Who are you?"
in a quest in vain.

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Nice. Very well written.

[FlawedByDesign]

I sense an inner struggle and identity lost.
Thought provoking, but what's with the rhyme? Haiku are not supposed to rhyme :S

[The Uncommon Muse]

nicely written and the theme and message are powerfully clear

[abhas]

not always a quest in vain... but a nice thought represented excellently... liked it!

[Marisa Kathleen Lopez]

I liked this one a lot! I love Haiku's and thought this one was very creative and different from the ones I'm used to. Great job!

[R E Tree]

I'm not really a haiku fan but this one impressed me. It's like you have lost your identity and you want it back

[TadKent]

I like this one a lot. I am a haiku fan, but this seeme like it could even be more. I would love to see a dialogue between a personified "pain" talking to a "pleasure".
Still very good though, liked it a lot!

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Understood. Very powerful haiku. Nicely penned.
Light,
SiddARTha