Something is not Right

As the dreams are disappearing,

and the hope is lightly sheering,

it is ominously clear

that something is not right.

What once was easy, now is hard.

Love's been whittled, a jagged shard,

and stars above behave

as something is not right.

We do not know what's come of us,

why suddenly, it is not really us.

All look up at the sky,

know something is not right.

Shattered dreams and frail surrenders,

no other time have we been more tender,

and all we know for sure

is something is not right.

Reviews

[Mary Fioratti]

Sometimes we can tell that something is not right... probably so subtle, but we can really tell, that it is something there.
repeating the sentence, "something is not right", made your poem be more real and the theme more strong.
Good writing.
*Mary*

[Leslie Philibert]

The phrase something is not right is brillant,it implies a kind of vague threat that is more threatening that a fear you understand.Packed together with some good words it makes en excellent poem.

[A-Lovely-Anxiety]

Very nice poem.