The Music Box

A story-telling poem that tells the tale of a beloved queen and her fate.

Walking along the streets

You hear a curious sound

You search until you've found the source

Intrigued by what you've found --

A tiny golden music box

Sitting on the ground

Appeared from nowhere 

it seemed to have done

Curious, curious

As would be to anyone

In puzzlement you wonder

and wonder yourself stiff

The thing you fail to realize

Is the long hidden myth

This music box - yes this same box

Belonged to Meredith. 

Ruled she did some centuries past

Beloved queen of Murrowfast

Graceful swan, gentle dove

This queen specialized in love

And what is more, in English lore

Young romance most did Meredith adore

Alas! The tale does not go on

Poor Meredith passed away one dawn

No one knows why

But for story's sake

They put it down to true heartbreak

Perhaps love itself was too much to take

That golden box there in your hand

I'll say this once, so understand

Is Meredith's surviving wish/command

The music box, her most prized possession

Appears to those with deep depression

True love the box will bring

Love such that the heart will sing

Once touched, a spell unfolds

Love at last! Joy untold!

Poor Meredith, a secret hid

Covered up the truth she did

See, Meredith so full of passion

and love that made the heart to burn

Never had a special gent

 To give her that love in return

And that is why her music box

Is found among the sad

To give its finders a shot at true love

The one thing Meredith never had

Author's Note

I'm not really used to writing poems, so am a bit rusty on format.

Is the rhyming tacky? Or does it fit?

Reviews

[DA]

I know this is someone's else review, but it tells exactly how I feel about this poem:

"I really like this poem, it has a good feel to it, and gives me an interesting vivid picture in my mind of past melding with the future. I like the idea of the sadness of this queen and the heart break that could have been bestowed on her. I also like the idea of the music box, it seems enchanting. I like your rhyming technique, I thought it all went very well together. "

[Bridget Murphy]

I loved it! It's a simple tale about love lost that can be told over and over again, and I like the way you had it entwined with a music box! Defenately a favorite for me! As for the rhyming scheme I saw nothing wrong with it!!! GOOD JOB!!!

[Wendy Seames Garner]

I loved you poem R.G.! I don't know if rhyming is tacky, but I've always liked it. I love music boxes, have quite a collection of them. The magical tinkling sound is enough to make a depressed person a little bit happier. I use to wind mine up as I made my way through the house cleaning, it made the cleaning more fun.

[Carmen-Rose McGill]

I don't know much about poetry either, but I like this. I like the folklore that you put into this; I really love folk tales. Thanks for writing this!

[patricia]

the third stanza was the one for me, had me wanting to go find out about this Meredith...i love history, folk lore etc. i liked it appearing to those with deep depression...the whole theme was realy interesting. A nice write, good rythm..o two lines jarred at the very end, perhaps with a word too many..but overall flowed beautifully. Thankyou.