Gun For A Tongue

Words that kill.

Gun For A Tongue

Let the bullets fly

From your mouth

Let them hit me

With a jolt of pain

And ultimate confusion

Let what comes next, 

The rush of blood trickling down, 

Condescend my every action

And state of being

With the words you have spoken

And the dark tone

Of your gunfire

Spit more bullets out

Because you still have ammo

And you see me lying there,

Struggling to hold on

While my eyes are bleeding tears

I trusted you

With the secrets I kept buried

You turned around to back-stab

But found another weapon

It left my body on fire,

My heart scarred,

And my soul damaged

Like you wanted

Out of this earthly plane,

I was cast into my darkest shadows

You were left still standing

You and your

Gun for a tongue

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Unspeakably powerful...you've worked this metaphor for perfection, and garnered my undivided attention along the way...I wonder how many poets out there were inspired to become poets on the basis of what you're written about here...it was certainly a factor in my decision to pick up the pen many moons ago. In other words, I relate to this one very much and I'm sure I'm not alone in that regard...phenomenal piece Savannah.

[Savannah Bly]

Wow, Thank you so much for your kind words, they mean a lot. I am glad you enjoyed the write! :)

[kublakhan27]

My pleasure :)

[New Theory]

Yess ratatat, full on fire with this poem, awesome ballistic poem about how words can often hurt more than anything else. :)

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you!

[New Theory]

You are welcome :)

[A. Amos]

I feel your words as the best part of reading your work is, as you know how to get your reader connected with your craft, you truly are stylish writer my friend.

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you for your kind words!

[Ifreakinloveyou]

This is awesome, your imagery is incredible and I love the metaphor! Very creative.

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you! I am glad you liked it (and the metaphor)!

[melissa]

This is a great poem i can't wait to read more keep up the great work and keep sending me more to read i love reading them

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you so much! We aren't friends so I can't send you RR's yet, but I just added you as a friend. I will definitely send you more of my writes.

[melissa]

Your welcome ok cool

[FlamingPhoenix]

Dayum! Girl, that is perfection in poetic anger for sure! Absolutely powerfully beautiful and beyond impressive!

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you so much! I am glad you enjoyed the read.

[Sami Khalil]

"My heart scarred,
And my soul damaged
Like you wanted
Out of this earthly plane,
I was cast into my darkest shadows
You were left still standing
You and your
Gun for a tongue"

Wow. Immensely powerful, sincerely touching, condescendingly actionable. Excellent...:)..............

[Savannah Bly]

Thank you so much for your kind words my friend! I am glad you liked it.

[Sami Khalil]

I did. You are welcome...:)..................