Ode To Pain

A friend of mine asked me to post a poem and I was reminded of my ex, so here is a depressing poem about the past. This has too many words to be a song by Taylor Swift.

Further I decend into your loving embrace
To feel no pain, to feel your love
Yet, I come to no avail
Further I decend into the future
With you in my arms
The pain is still evident
When you whisper lies in my ear
A never ending pain is what I feel
Breathless and shaken
My soul is for the taking
While you play me for all my worth
Further I decend into the darkness
Without a whole heart
I barely make a sound
There is no one around
To help me embrace the light
I have yet to win this fight
Further I sink
In my own internal doom
I love you and yet I hate you
For burying me in this despair
That I will never recover
Mi amore

Author's Note

This may have sucked, but go ahead and tell me what you thought about it.

Reviews

[Sylvia]

Smooth and dark, kind of like slightly bitter chocolate.... I assure you that this poem doesn't suck, though I get that being a writer usually means you hate your own work... Gave me the shivers and I didn't hiccup once, so well done : ) Really get the feeling of your love pulling you down into the dark, and you being unable to let it go.

[jasmine levert]

I can really relate to this poem. I really liked it.

[Bob Sherunkle]

Savannah,we've all been with some one like this.This is how we learn about each other as so called "human beings".Great write,it would be a flash back to all of us who have loved and lost..and stood alone.

[Hypnos]

It seems to me that you suffered from depression after your ex, for whatever reason, left you. A very well done poem none the less, but remember never give up. If you need help in matters of love please feel free to use a prayer or two my profile.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

The poem is about a person that steps into her predator illusion consciously
Taken into a visual ride of dreams into the future that are whispered for her to lower her guard
When submits into his requests is left with no answers
When the character realizes that her predator thinks she has been played does not complain
While playing her role she notices and learns there is no one to help her
When she realizes she made her love predator think of it like that
She is fully aware and ready to continue on her next victim