Mirror and Frost....

Mirror and Frost…..

(This was originally written as a song with a guitar accompaniment, and is actually the first song I’ve ever written, I would very much like opinions and feedback on it. I havent written another song yet, but I have had many lyrics brainstormed. I’m new at this ^ ^)

Mirror show me who to be,

Mirror show me who I am,

Walking slowly all alone,

On shattered glass, of broken dreams.

Hiding softly where I go,

What I search for, I don’t yet know.

Faces fade in front of me,

Winter freeze inside of me…

Winter making me so cold,

Shivering and suffering,

Where has all my sunshine gone?

Why am I last one left?

Why does frost reclaim my breath…

Everything is falling now,

The sun is darkening now,

So somebody show me how to wake through the snow,

And somebody set me free,

break this chamber, inside of me-

Remove the cold,

That hides in me…

Remove this cold….

That hides in me…...

Reviews

[annabellee]

I'm sure that this is a lovely song, the lyrics are at least.
Well written piece straight from the heart.
Loved it :)

[Patrick O'Neil]

Wow, really nice , could feel the emotion in the words, with the right melody it would be awesome.

[Catherine Frain]

This is a very amazingly well written poem/song. I love the description in the words that allow you to see it as you read through the poem/song.

[RedRozeNinja13]

its a poetrified song- XD (le only way to really explain it)

[Catherine Frain]

This is a very good poem/song.

Was this for a character of yours?

[A Human attemtping to E..]

I Honestly don't know what to say my friend. I don't want to say the wrong thing. But Truthfully, if I were to say what I believe without trying to sound so pompous or indirect, I would have to say I like it a lot, Thumbs up. I AM A lover when it comes down to it, of snow and ice, and frost and birds and trees alike. My point in saying this that even the chambers form vivid thoughts inside my head and help me to wonder off in my fascinations. Keep on writing most definitely buddy. HMMMMMMMMMHMMMMMMMMMMMMMMHMMMMMMM. Good songs Is there more? I love it. AHHHH IF ONLY IF ONLY.... I AM ABOUT TO GET HELP FOR MY SO CALLED ADDICTION..... ARE YOU HAPPY FOR ME???? Not to put this on blast hehe..... SEE your music has me speaking it did something to the chords of my heart.....hahaha omg ok ok peace.... SAYONARA!!!! LOL MUCH LOVE OK OK AHHHHHHH.BY THE WAY Without meaning anything specific or so spectacular, even better if the answer was straightforward and could be but was not necessary, are you perhaps a lover or a fan of "THE MOON" ???

[Patches I'm not so new..]

This could be a "country song" a very good countrty if the right crooner crooned it.
But I do think you could expand on it a bit.

[Pól]

Mmmm......................

[CoraZanini]

I honestly think this is very good.Like the emotions.Keep up with writing!