Oblivian

as it came..

I am nothing

& I want to melt in this nothingness

so subtle,so pure

whether life loses its bridle

or galore

the chasm of beauty & stillness

will be drunk as life seeps in more

I'll thank every fraction of time

& every atom of being

as you appreciate this wholeness 

in nothingness ..... 

Reviews

[Allen Smuckler]

oblivion = nothingness....eh
maybe someday we'll be able to find and understand the difference
good use of metaphors, vivid and concise imagery...
You have an uncanny ability Shweta to tackle massive topics in a concise and direct manner....
I like that...get to the point...don't beat around the bush ...and hammer it home...
terrific write
allen

[Shweta Singh]

dear Allen,Thanks for taking time out for this wonderful review...I'm touched!
My co-relation between Oblivian & nothingness is not as synonyms...rather the interpretation is that as one slips into that 'obliviousness',one gradually transcends into that sublime state of nothingness..
Thank you for picking that detail as many might not have understood my interpretation...

[sakshi arora]

its a flawless piece just loved it splendid read and write.very impressive its a piece from the purity of creativity.

[Onku Ghosh]

Fantastic!!! A short poem but written to perfection. An apt title,as always.Your last two lines "as you appreciate this wholeness/ in nothingness."sum up the poem.
You do write very well......there is a natural flow...........

[Shweta Singh]

You just don't know how great it feels to read such a review when YOU write such kind words...it inspires me to write more & write better...Love you so much!

[Onku Ghosh]

The fact hat you are a great writer is true. have been reading other peoples reviews about your poems and they all hold you in high esteem.love you too.Please read my 1st poem Mothrhood and if you have the time read the poems that i had submitted earlier to the present ones.I think they are much better

[Zelle]

this one is deep and holds true..
well a person spends his/her whole life finding wholeness in emptiness or nothingness as you mentioned..
keep writing! :)

[Shweta Singh]

Thanks Zelle for being here & enjoying it...your words are truly encouraging...cheers!

[Samuel Jack]

This poem feels very classical in style to me (an uneducated peasant), it reminds me of my failed attempts at meditation :) I got it to work a few times, and the stillness of the mind did indeed feel beautiful. Good poem.

[Shweta Singh]

My dear Samuel,you are such a humble soul,who said that you are an uneducated peasant?rather I find your poems meandering to different paradigms of complexities sometimes which is very enervating...I believe it's the action,thought & views which makes one truly educated..Meditation is focusing,enjoying & harmonizing with any life-giving process;not necessarily sitting quietly to feel the stillness,it can be bird-watching,cooking,cleaning,listening to good music etc.
Thanks for This wonderful review... :-)

[Ronald J Chapman]

Good Maybe try to add more verses.

[Shweta Singh]

Sure Ronald...thanks for this feedback :)

[NITHIN PURPLE]

of course oblivion is much talking about pure forgetfulness,great views with fabric thoughts,
we lost are forget,might gains with much strength when wakes,and some times that sleep ne'er end in a fortune too..too much sleep shall that breath forgets to live...here your thoughts want to rest unto forget the bad time or to come up with strength more,in wake again?