Tell The World

Tell the world that He is coming back
Back from heaven to save us sinners
Sinners prepare for Him to save you from Satan's trap
Satan's trap has kept us from getting to Christ
Christ will come back down from the heavens
The heavens will open up for those who deserve
Those who deserve His love and mercy
Mercy on those don't deserve it and He will show
Will show the world that He has beaten death
Death no longer holds mastery over Him, because
Because He has died on that wooden cross
On that cross He said 'It is finished', then He took
Took His last breath and gave up His Spirit to His Father
His Father told us that He gave His one and only Son so
So our sins could be forgiven, so go ahead
Ahead and shout it from the mountain tops that Jesus Christ
That Jesus Christ is coming back, so go ahead and tell the masses
The masses that He is near, so sinners prepare yourselves
Prepare yourselves for God's Son to give you mercy
Mercy that you thought you didn't deserve, but have hope
Have hope for your souls, because He has risen
He has risen for three days and then ascended to heaven
Heaven is where He sits at the right hand of God and where
Where He has promised us eternal life, so
So tell the world that He is coming back.

Author's Note

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Reviews

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I love this . Streaming words from your heart. Like blues of humanity.

[Erudite]

I truly don't mean to offend you, but this poem does seem somewhat gimmicky. I'm a Christian as well, but I don't want to say that I love your poem just in order to be nice. I will do my best to be kind in this review while at the same time critiquing it to help you grow as a writer. (Honestly, I wanted to just not write a review because I don't want to offend you, but I decided that if everyone did that no one would ever learn anything)

So, I can sum up how I feel about this poem in two short points. 1: It reads like a long run-on sentence that repeats itself with every line. 2: it's kind of a list of maxims that every christian has been taught and recited for a long time, without much emotion.

Again, I don't want to hurt you at all with this review, just trying to help. My advice would be to dig deep about how you feel spiritually and find something that moves you to write about. Also, try to find some religious topic that most people wouldn't think to write about, or something more original. For instance, I once wrote about the last week of Jesus' life from Judas Iscariot's perspective. If you write about something that's more unique, and take an honest human approach to spirituality, you'll probably have more of an opportunity to talk about emotions. You could also illustrate the battle between loving God and hurting him with your sinning.

All in all, I know you can dig deeper. Best wishes! Please don't hate me for this! :)

[Sascha]

Thank you Cumulative Inhibitions for your review. I appreciate that you were being honest but this style of writing is a style that I made up on my own, and it's a something that I think is unique. But i shall keep what you said in mind. You are very thoughtful and I am not mad at you. So thank you for speaking your mind.