prophecy

A prophecy told by the ancients of long ago. Events that will soon come to reality

Along time ago, when the planet was still new there were two brothers. Twins to be exact, well they had been very competitive throughout their lives. One always trying to out do the other. Their names were Theodas and Lucien. Theodas was the older of them. Lucien felt he would never be seen the same way as his brother.
So, they built the kingdoms of Aelasmore and Galemwyn. Both strived to be the best. To become the one ruler of Treon. There was so much unrest between them. A curse was placed on them and their families. Generation after generation would face the same unrest between the kingdoms until....
According to a prophecy told by the elders of a dawn that would break and unravel. Marked by what could be the most gruesome battle ever to be fought. Out of all of this he will come. One that no one has ever seen before not will he be seen again. A man of great power. All will know of him, but not who he is. He is cunning and very bold not like any other. He will walk about without raising suspicion from anyone ln silence he moves like a shadow.
At the same time this man rises there will come to power a lady. With grander power than that which he possesses. She will be the only one to vanquish him and send him in to the grave. Where he will no longer be a threat.
If successful thus lady will be the one to end the curse forever. Saving all of Treon and keeping it from complete and utter ruin.

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

It sounds very interesting... And giving us a bit of hint about the back story is a perfect thing to do. Your materials in this write is very good which I think people will love, kind of supernatural powers battle... I want to know how the lady dismisses that unknown man...

Sammie again I believe you didn't edit this chapter yet, which you'll do soon I know... There are some full stops and comas missing my frnd, otherwise it's perfect and accurate...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[sinNsincerity]

I don't read too much fiction because it bores me, not to sound like a dick, but I did make some edits for you....



Along time ago, when the planet was still new, there were two brothers. Twins to be exact. Well they had been very competitive throughout their lives and their actions showed this very well. One always trying to out do the other. Their names were Theodas and Lucien. Theodas was the older of them and Lucien felt he would never live up to the status of his brother’s likeness.
So, they built the kingdoms of Aelasmore and Galemwyn. Both strived to be the best, too become the one ruler of Treon, and it didn’t matter how it was accomplished. There was so much unrest between them. A curse was placed on them and their families, which lived and killed for generations after generations and others to come would face the same unrest between the kingdoms until....
According to a prophecy told by the elders, a dawn that would break and unravel lied within a mist marked by what could be the most gruesome battle ever to be fought . Out of all of this, he will come! One that no one has ever seen before and won’t be seen ever again. A man of great power. All will know of him, but not who he is. He is cunning, bold and humbled like no other. He will walk about without raising suspicion from anyone because his silence is like a shadow.
At the same time, this man rises there will come to power a lady. With grander power than that which he possesses. She will be the only one to vanquish him and send him into the grave- where he will no longer be a threat.
If successful, thus lady will be the one to end the curse forever. Saving all of Treon and keeping it from complete and utter ruin.

[samparks,sam]

The determination I see in your though. Cofffee given power you nice mind for selection words.