"Ode To Coffee, That Frivolous, Daunting Liquid
50 Shades To Cure Your Pain
An Open IV Right Into My Vein." - A good choice of Ode poem material. Some grammar things I noticed - you don't need to capitalize "that", "Daunting" and so on. Unless you've done it for aesthetic purposes. I notice that you've done it throughout the whole piece, so if It has a purpose - keep it. I applaud you're consistency.
"Ode To Coffee In All It's Dark Splendor
Flirting With Danger And Full Of Lust
Beckoning With Flavor, Each One Robust" - I don't usually care for a ton of rhyming in poetry, but I feel like the rhyming is not detrimental to the poems intent here. It's not distracting and I believe the words fit nicely.
"Ode To Coffee Without Which I'd Be Dead
My Cup Is Ready And Awaiting Your Hue
Au Revoir Until Then, I Bid Thee, Adieu. " - I like the playful tone of the piece. It's easygoing and fun to read.
Overall, I like that the piece only lasts about a sip of said coffee. Interesting description and word choice. Great ending. Thank you for the read, write on.
Thank you all so much for your wonderful compliments. I haven't been on here (much) lately due to a bout with influenza.
But never fear, I will be back shortly. : )
I have quite the love affair with coffee... I am reserved with it, take special care with it, but when I am dead, will it still be there...? Hah, loved this, an ode' to the greatness, indeed... With caffeine this was penned...
"Ode To Coffee, That Frivolous, Daunting Liquid
50 Shades To Cure Your Pain
An Open IV Right Into My Vein." - A good choice of Ode poem material. Some grammar things I noticed - you don't need to capitalize "that", "Daunting" and so on. Unless you've done it for aesthetic purposes. I notice that you've done it throughout the whole piece, so if It has a purpose - keep it. I applaud you're consistency.
"Ode To Coffee In All It's Dark Splendor
Flirting With Danger And Full Of Lust
Beckoning With Flavor, Each One Robust" - I don't usually care for a ton of rhyming in poetry, but I feel like the rhyming is not detrimental to the poems intent here. It's not distracting and I believe the words fit nicely.
"Ode To Coffee Without Which I'd Be Dead
My Cup Is Ready And Awaiting Your Hue
Au Revoir Until Then, I Bid Thee, Adieu. " - I like the playful tone of the piece. It's easygoing and fun to read.
Overall, I like that the piece only lasts about a sip of said coffee. Interesting description and word choice. Great ending. Thank you for the read, write on.
Coffee is awful! :D Jk, I myself don't drink it. :D Amazing poem btw, :)
This can be related to many coffee lovers like the comments below :)
Keep it up!