Country Boy, City Girl

Lonely, country boy lookin’

For something he’s never seen

Moving somewhere that he’s never been



Thinking it’s her that will keep him there

Going through the motions without a care



But she keeps calling him, beggin’ please

Her voice so soft like a summer breeze

And the smell of jasmine in the air

Livin’ a country life without a care



And he looks back…



City girl finding something new

For years he gives her something to do

Cures her boredom, if just for awhile

But his speech, his walk, just isn’t her style



She loves the city and its anonymity

She loves the buildings that touch the sky

And she asks ‘why oh why’ as she cries

And he calls to her…and he calls to her



And she looks back…



Sometimes strangers sharing a bed

He’s with her but ‘it’ remains instead

Girl keeps on trying but soon she’ll be dead

Thoughts of fresh earth are filling his head



And he looks back…



She wants to run away and disappear

In the crowds that walk the streets all night

The city’s hum is her only friend

Neither one letting go or willing to bend



And she looks back…



Before they know it, they both turn away

To the passions they used to know

Leaving each other more every day



The love they once shared has started to crack

He’s gone now and there’s no turning back



And he looks back…

And she looks back...

Reviews

[apennylate]

Hmm, I am quite the fan of black and white elements, comparisons, ideas... Really, and this... stunned me, not because of content or word choice, which are both stellar, mind you... But because of the way you portray the stark contrast of love and "love"... I was impressed with the metaphors in this one, even if that was not the intention... Superbly penned...

[Glen Weimann]

Very evocative. Some nice pictures and observations. I love the repeated 'looks back ...'. I think we do that both before calling time on a relationship and also later on, so in a literary sense it's a very evocative notion. It's interesting but at the same time sad that we can be drawn to another because of so many aspects of their personality, the chemistry if you will. But if/when that becomes tired and faded, does one's origins come to the fore and reassert themselves. Can love conquer all?

Nice work!
Nigel

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice movement of words and thoughts. I could feel the song in the words. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry. I liked this one.
Coyote

[Broken Hearts]

Beautiful.... This brought back some memories that I hadn't thought about in a while, so thank you. I love the way you put this piece together!

[EcstaticEuphoria]

Beautiful... love the juxtaposition and comparison and rhythm. Well Done! As Always!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Very interesting poem lovely to read

[Taz]

Well done here I really like the way I can feel the words emotion, you obviously made a very good piece here, I say good job! one hundred for you my friend.

[Jes' Pi]

Amazing poem...
The words are just perfect and there is a lot of emotion in your poem. A story...Not a love story..A story about love!
Well, a poem about love haha.

Amazing job...keep writing!

[Stacy Purvis]

I very humbly thank you. : )

[andrew mitchell]

a lovely write, well structured, great poetic skills and a story filled with imagery

[writ rajat]

so nice dear your rhymes is so clear and to the point,
this poem relieves my heart and joint