Steel Walls And Shards Of Glass

Just to remember the look on your face,

A conversation I wish I could erase.

What you've ceased to realize in all the time that’s passed,

We’re both unable to surpass steel walls and broken glass.

No one person is at fault for things,

We both left each other standing in the rain.

If I could go back, rewind the hands of time,

I’d take you in a moments notice and make you mine.

For not one second has passed that I haven’t loved you

Or thought of you in even the smallest of ways.

If given another chance for our love to grow,

I’d risk the cuts and broken bones.

Reviews

[apennylate]

The rhyming and syllable count is actually quite spot-on... The breath and lines are also very well done... As for content, the wordplay and metaphorical brashness is absolutely captivating... I think we have all been there... Between steel and fragility... Beautifully penned...

[Island Hippy]

Aloha Anastasia, there is lingering pain and regret like a final acceptance. The last two lines are very strong, so much emotion. Izzy

[Somu]

A great piece of work...keep it up

[Najam Us Saher]

Very nice. I truly liked it. What's done can never be change and to live with it is truly very hard.

[wordman]

if only i could turn back time,i would make you mine
our hearts would fall in loce,our souls would entwine

[mercy party]

Nostalgia might be the last chance sometimes to keep things together. Loyalties and allegiances tend fade long after love.
Just my take on this. This poem felt vulnerable, that's what made it so good! :)

[Surya]

Haha, last lines showed what love is meabt to be..I enjoyed it..:)

[Paul Bell]

Some just can't live together. Doesn't erase the pain though. Probably makes it all the more painful.

[Mr.Writer]

Awe... this is soo beautiful Anastasia! It gives me more warmth in my soul. Each time it rhymes, my heart skips a beat...
Keep it up!

[Stacy Purvis]

Oh, you. Lol... : )))

[Mr.Writer]

Lol xD It is also sad to read due to the regrets and mistakes the couple had, but the beautifullness takes over :)

[Stacy Purvis]

Yes, but remember, there is beauty in all things...not everyone can see it. you did.

[Mr.Writer]

Yep, very true, there's beauty in everything :)

[Mr.Writer]

I'm also happy that I saw it :)

[Richard simpson]

It's surely gut wrenching and amazing. It pulls you in deep and never ever lets go of you. I love the ways it moves you and takes you on a journey through the eternal soul. It's surely a classic in the making.

[Stacy Purvis]

Thank you for your wonderful words of encouragement. xxx