Verisimilitude Of Man

Ode to man, who, in the face of tyranny 

and in the midst of strife

Does not retreat or refrain but

In that pivotal moment, stands steadfast and strong 

against iniquities, slander and

violence

Who faces them with bravery and hope

Who, in his chivalry and valor will not concede, 

no, he will not be defeated but

Instead, he fights. 

He fights the good fight for individual freedom 

and equality for all.

With strong mind and heart of compassion understands

For man is more than the tone of his skin, his sex, 

his religion, his culture or the

choice of whom he loves.

Man is more than this Earthly shell which will cease 

and become dust once again.

Man resides within.

He is a Light to burn bright for others to see.

For what we do here is ubiquitous 

and our voice will echo through the ages

and our time will reveal the Truth.

So that others may know:

We fought the good and brave fight and we did conquer.

The glory is ours, forevermore.

Notwithstanding the foregoing.

Never give up, never give in, 

eyes always forward to a bright future and to a day when

man will finally defeat the true beast.

He shall be free.

He will end this horrendous suffering

and the war against his worst mortal enemy…

Himself.

Reviews

[Rynn]

"Ode to man, who, in the face of tyranny
and in the midst of strife
Does not retreat or refrain but" - I like the kind of cliff hanger effect you have on the last line, by adding 'but' and continuing on. I like the tone so far.

"In that pivotal moment, stands steadfast and strong
against iniquities, slander and
violence" - the word 'in' does not need to be capitalized since it's in the middle of a sentence. You paint a strong visual.

"Who faces them with bravery and hope
Who, in his chivalry and valor will not concede,
no, he will not be defeated but
Instead, he fights. " - again, be aware of where sentences begin and end, as usually, the reader will read it the way you present it to them. I like the feel of this a lot. It's very elegantly written.

"He fights the good fight for individual freedom
and equality for all.
With strong mind and heart of compassion understands
For man is more than the tone of his skin, his sex,
his religion, his culture or the
choice of whom he loves." - This gave the piece a modern spin; the idea of equality in it's purest form. Excellent. This really has me envisioning a king giving a speech to his people.

"Man is more than this Earthly shell which will cease
and become dust once again.
Man resides within." - Again, I love the message conveyed here.

"He is a Light to burn bright for others to see.
For what we do here is ubiquitous
and our voice will echo through the ages
and our time will reveal the Truth.
So that others may know:" - I really appreciate your word choice in this stanza. It read, to me, that you thought a lot about how you wanted to say this.

"Never give up, never give in,
eyes always forward to a bright future and to a day when
man will finally defeat the true beast.
He shall be free.
He will end this horrendous suffering
and the war against his worst mortal enemy…Himself." - You did a great job on the ending. I find for myself that endings are always hard. You've nailed it. Short, sweet, to the point, and with a spin.

Overall, I had no trouble imagining this, and painting my own picture with your words. That elegance you've written with does not come easily to masses and works really well for your point. Thank you for the read, write on.

-Rynn

[Joey Nizz]

What an amazing tale, I loved the conclusion and most of what was said in the writing.
Well done Anastasia.

[wordman]

he will fight for the rights of one and all,
catch you if you fall

[MarkAndTheOcean]

Very wonderful, very engaging. This poem illustrates a whole variety of emotions and ideas on one subject. Keep it up!

[M.E.Lyle]

Bravo! An excellent piece of work, so well written, with a smooth flow.
The message is fantastic and well expressed.
What can I say? I loved it.

[Stacy Purvis]

I very humbly thank you! So glad you enjoyed it! Cheers! xxx

[Mr.Writer]

Very amazing! Strong, engaging, powerful... I like this piece alot! :) Keep it up!

[Stacy Purvis]

Thank you, kind sir. I shall perservere! Onward!
: )