Verisimilitude Of Man

Ode to man, who, in the face of tyranny 

and in the midst of strife

Does not retreat or refrain but

In that pivotal moment, stands steadfast and strong 

against iniquities, slander and

violence

Who faces them with bravery and hope

Who, in his chivalry and valor will not concede, 

no, he will not be defeated but

Instead, he fights. 

He fights the good fight for individual freedom 

and equality for all.

With strong mind and heart of compassion understands

For man is more than the tone of his skin, his sex, 

his religion, his culture or the

choice of whom he loves.

Man is more than this Earthly shell which will cease 

and become dust once again.

Man resides within.

He is a Light to burn bright for others to see.

For what we do here is ubiquitous 

and our voice will echo through the ages

and our time will reveal the Truth.

So that others may know:

We fought the good and brave fight and we did conquer.

The glory is ours, forevermore.

Notwithstanding the foregoing.

Never give up, never give in, 

eyes always forward to a bright future and to a day when

man will finally defeat the true beast.

He shall be free.

He will end this horrendous suffering

and the war against his worst mortal enemy…

Himself.

Reviews

[Rynn]

"Ode to man, who, in the face of tyranny
and in the midst of strife
Does not retreat or refrain but" - I like the kind of cliff hanger effect you have on the last line, by adding 'but' and continuing on. I like the tone so far.

"In that pivotal moment, stands steadfast and strong
against iniquities, slander and
violence" - the word 'in' does not need to be capitalized since it's in the middle of a sentence. You paint a strong visual.

"Who faces them with bravery and hope
Who, in his chivalry and valor will not concede,
no, he will not be defeated but
Instead, he fights. " - again, be aware of where sentences begin and end, as usually, the reader will read it the way you present it to them. I like the feel of this a lot. It's very elegantly written.

"He fights the good fight for individual freedom
and equality for all.
With strong mind and heart of compassion understands
For man is more than the tone of his skin, his sex,
his religion, his culture or the
choice of whom he loves." - This gave the piece a modern spin; the idea of equality in it's purest form. Excellent. This really has me envisioning a king giving a speech to his people.

"Man is more than this Earthly shell which will cease
and become dust once again.
Man resides within." - Again, I love the message conveyed here.

"He is a Light to burn bright for others to see.
For what we do here is ubiquitous
and our voice will echo through the ages
and our time will reveal the Truth.
So that others may know:" - I really appreciate your word choice in this stanza. It read, to me, that you thought a lot about how you wanted to say this.

"Never give up, never give in,
eyes always forward to a bright future and to a day when
man will finally defeat the true beast.
He shall be free.
He will end this horrendous suffering
and the war against his worst mortal enemy…Himself." - You did a great job on the ending. I find for myself that endings are always hard. You've nailed it. Short, sweet, to the point, and with a spin.

Overall, I had no trouble imagining this, and painting my own picture with your words. That elegance you've written with does not come easily to masses and works really well for your point. Thank you for the read, write on.

-Rynn

[Neville]

just about sums me up my friend...... once started, this turned into a compelling read....

[mournful bear]

evil comes from within' thus every 'huMAN' may have an evil! very well put i may have read it my own way, but it is the interpretation by 'huMAN'

[EcstaticEuphoria]

This one left me breathless! Such amazing truth, so well written and characterized!!

Keep 'em coming!!

[Hebe]

Love the message here... gives hope and inspiration an exceptional write!

[Surya]

True indeed, well least someone accepted man can do something, haha, just kidding...
Flow is good, words are apt...story line worked well...I enjoyed..:)

[Bear]

Good prospective and a fitting image of mankind which brings up a question for you "Why did you make it gender specific rather than all encompassing (man verses mankind or humanity?" It is not a problem I was just curious about your thought-process. It was a pleasure to read, insightfully frightening and though provoking the nightmare humanity is capable of because we do tend to be self destructive. Bravo! Thanks for the nightmares :~) Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Stacy Purvis]

Don't forget the "t" in thought lol

Those T's...pesky things. 😂😂😂

[Bear]

LOL I am leaving that to Grammarly now :~)

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words. True for the all of us. Fight the demons of regret and not doing enough. You create situations and you left the reader with something to think about. Thank you Anastasia for sharing the amazing poetry and thoughts.
Coyote

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Man is more than this Earthly shell which will cease
and become dust once again.
Man resides within."

True. This portrays a powerful message.
And the last lines are just perfect. Man's true enemy really is himself...
Well done, Anastasia 👍

[Najam Us Saher]

I liked the message and the theme. Well done.