Aspects of you

Aspects of you

A Poem by Sasha-lee
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the longing to find someone perfectly suited for you

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You're my obsession
the tingling sensation you give me when you 
you crinkle your nose just before you allow that lone tear to fall down that
that rosy cheek
you may not acknowledge the fact that I know just about everything
everything about you 
but every aspect of your being is in correlation with my soul 
or that staring at you gives me total utility 
or that the manner in which you arch your delicate back as the sun and moon collide commands the birds to sing so beautifully
You're my obsession
you're that person 
the person I wish really existed

© 2013 Sasha-lee


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Oh, I'm so sorry but I like your writing so I'm gonna have to be honest, "rosy cheeks" not the 19th century. we must omit such phrases. Also you are a wonderful write, perhaps editing your work to give it more structure and strength, developing a tone would be excellent. As oppose to such free, free-verse, your writing is not free enough.

Example:

You're my obsession,
The tingling sensation you give me,
When you crinkle your nose--

And so on, just a bit of editing will do justice to your work.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sasha-lee

11 Years Ago

appreciate the honesty



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For many people, one of the most frustrating aspects of life is not being able to understand other people's behavior........

Posted 11 Years Ago


Oh, I'm so sorry but I like your writing so I'm gonna have to be honest, "rosy cheeks" not the 19th century. we must omit such phrases. Also you are a wonderful write, perhaps editing your work to give it more structure and strength, developing a tone would be excellent. As oppose to such free, free-verse, your writing is not free enough.

Example:

You're my obsession,
The tingling sensation you give me,
When you crinkle your nose--

And so on, just a bit of editing will do justice to your work.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sasha-lee

11 Years Ago

appreciate the honesty

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Sasha-lee
Sasha-lee

Johannesburg, South Africa



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A Poem by Sasha-lee