We ride North, awaken!

A 'les enfants de la patrie' for my fantasy novel

Set aside dull labour, set aside cold pleasure
We ride for the mountains, for the evergreen treasure
Ah! The call of the Lord of the Snows has come
We ride North, awaken! We ride North!

Set aside raiment of silk, set aside flag of white
We ride for the mountains, for every man's birthright
Ah! The call of the Lord of the Winds has come
We ride North, awaken! We ride North!

Set aside frail keening, set aside menial care
We ride for the mountains, for revenge on an old despair
Ah! The call of the Lord of the Snows has come
We ride North, awaken! We ride North!

Rosamundi, Rosamundi, Rose of all the World
We ride for the mountains, for the planting of the flag unfurled
Ah! The call of the Lord of the Thorns has come
We ride North, awaken! We ride North!

Reviews

[Healing Star]

Hibah,

I like this, a lot of Energy.
I was born in the North of America, Michigan, Lake Superior, tall trees amazing forests, tons of snow.
Rosamundi, Rose of all the World.
The Lord of the Wind and the Lord of the Snow - they guide us to the treasure trove.
Very nice poem.

[Sarusai Hiryu]

Thanks!
I was born in the plains where it never snows. But every year, we go North to the mountains ...

[Shay]

very good internal connection between the stanzas.

[Sarusai Hiryu]

Thanks, Shay!

[closed]

almost epic. makes me want to read the book now

[Sarusai Hiryu]

Still writing it... but thanks!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Excellent poem! It was almost like a chant, I love the flow!

[Sarusai Hiryu]

Thank you!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

You are welcome!

[An owl on the moon]

Such a powerful, lifting anthem that rises in a fierce light of words and rhythms! It just feels so epic...

[Sarusai Hiryu]

Thank you!

[Marie]

I really like this. It reads like an inspirational march.

[Sarusai Hiryu]

Thank you!

[Boranus]

this is exceptional! a battle hymn of splendor. I commend your effort and your writing. Very good indeed. I like your diction, the rhythm and the repetition. It has purpose. This poem is destined for greatness and so are YOU. And so are you! Ride on, Ride North-- to victory!

[Sarusai Hiryu]

Thanks! That's very nice of you.