Tears and Rain - 2015

Tears fall down my face
Rain falls from the sky
salt and fresh intermingling
trickling down, down,
Down.

In the coldness
there is no hope
no hope, but a dark,
Empty void.

He took my heart,

and left me,

breaking it to pieces

Tears and rain mixed.
both of them are
here, the same
moment,
the same life.

There is no hope,
there is only
sadness.

I will never be
who I used to be.

My heart is gone,

shattered.

Tears fall down my face
Rain falls from the sky
salt and fresh intermingling
trickling down, down,
Down.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i am thinking of my heart ...cut and droplets bleeding down down down ... but the rain is a giver of life for the most part ..refreshing the earth and washing those that dance in the showers ... so there is hope :) its a pretty straight forward poem ...i was looking for more personifications, colors, scents or something ... but perhaps that would ruin it ... the repetition of trickling down etc. does plant the mood ... great pic ...
E.

[SnowCat]

Good poem deep emotions thank you for sharing

[Chris]

it is a lovely gif pic.

The taste of despair - deeper than mere sadness... and it's a self-feeding circling.

[maria ( rose)]

You expressed the poem perfectly ...
the picture with the rain falling is brilliant, great job !!!!

[KeiraOndrus]

I LOVE IT SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH!!!!!!

[Workvio]

Karen Carpenter, poor girl, sang the song, Rainy Days & Mondays, "rainy days and Mondays always get me down." Rain speaks to my heart of sadness and depression over things that life sends our way, and your tears are an affirmation of that sadness and its true intensity ... Clearly, life as someone trusted has taken away something that can never be regained, to leave you empty and blue ... A lament, very sweetly written ...

[KeiraOndrus]

I like how you connected the rain to the tears, it really brings out the meaning of the story! You could add a little more descriptive words.

[SariahM]

okay keira!

[Poseidon]

My first impression of the poem if one of those days where you just you just feel depressed and things will not be able to get better. I love the association made with the rain. Makes me think of how people will try to hide their sadness from others. Which i feel you depict with the mixing of tears and rain. I really enjoyed it.

[SariahM]

thanks! :)

[Poseidon]

Your welcome!