Invisible - 2015

Loving someone who doesn't even know you exist anymore...

As I was walking down the street,
A thought passed through my head.
I was walking down the street,
And your bright blue eyes
Met mine.

You did not see me there,
you did not hear me say
"I love you"

I do not Exist to You
I am invisible.
I have broken your heart,
And it will not happen again.

I am the empty shell,
The one that will
Keep coming back,
For I love you.

As I was walking down the street,
a thought passed through my head.
I was walking down the street,
Our eyes will never meet,
For I am invisible.

I love you,
And I will never stop.

As I was walking down the street,
a thought passed through my head.
I was walking down the street,
Our eyes will never meet,
For I am invisible.

Author's Note

I was actually walking down a street when I thought of this poem. SO DANG IRONIC!

Reviews

[Yashoda]

I also start off each line with a capital letter *high 5 for being fancy*
The line 'For I am invisible' got me every time.

[SariahM]

thanks Yash-- can I call you that?

[Yashoda]

aha yesss you could, most of my friends do :)

[SariahM]

K! :P

[McBear]

Hmm. This was very interesting and full of feelings!
Just one thing.. when you do writing and such, after a comma, you have to have a lowercase.
You probably know this and no, I am not saying you are dumb or something. Just an observation.

[SariahM]

I was just putting a caps ahead of every line, and its my style, so...

[McBear]

It was just an observation.. Wasn't trying to offend you D:

[SariahM]

:D thats okay. You were trying to help.

[McBear]

:) Thank you for understanding my intentions, friend.

[jesserose99]

you sent me a read request Sariah...but my review is right below! :P

[SariahM]

oops. When i send read requests i usually send it to ALL my friends... sorry.

[jesserose99]

no worries sweetheart...I read it again anyway..lol

[ExquisiteEyes]

A sad and touching poem. I like the way you have repeated certain lines.

[Bohrium Guy]

Damn I thought you wrote this for me.... Oh wait I have brown/Hazel eyes (They Change Colors in moods) OK I like the write and it displays good imagery. Thanks for sharing.

~Rob~

[SariahM]

okaaaaaay... wut? how old are you even?

[Bohrium Guy]

I know how old you are and I was just joking with you. No worries. Calm down. :)

[Len]

Sariah, I enjoyed it--if I can say that given its sad content--and yet, I think you have much more in your creative arsenal than just love poetry, and I for one would like to experience your poetic thoughts/feelings on Nature, friendship, family, faith/or doubt, betrayal, hatred, prejudice, et al. What do you think? I don't know if you do this or not, but I would tell my students to memorize great poets' work that moves them. All great poets do that. It's health food for the imagination!

[Shielah Yuyama]

This is great! I felt the emotion on the poem :)

[jesserose99]

The repetition works, especially because the feeling of invisibility, you almost need to repeat yourself. Could be a song actually just with a different kind of structure.

[SariahM]

Nice... I'll try to come up with a tune sometime. :D